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Carbohydrained

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Let’s Build a Poem Together 3

(in it’s completion)

 

Carbohydrained

I can see so much in this mirror before me

The years have passed by, they've been so unkind

I need an eraser to erase away the cottage cheese

That’s beginning to collect itself on my fat behind

 

My melons are not quite as firm as before

My bottle shaped figure, now looks like a pear

The tight bum I once wiggled now sits on the floor

My bumps that were here, have sunken down there

 

Time plays us all, his guise unfair

I’ve got aches in places that didn’t before exist

I can't get my ankles to walk up the stairs

My Bow Flex “come hither’s”, yet still I resist

 

Some weights, an exercise bike lost under the bed

Will never replace my chair and these chips

Twinkies and Ho Ho’s, dance through my head

A moment on the lips, 3 life times on the hips!

 

From my once toned arm, hangs a huge mud flap

Six chins replace the one that I had

When I try to run, I just hear "Slap, Slap, Slap"

Gone are the days of dressing scantily clad

 

Title - pjjustin

Line 1 - run4w4ytr4in

Line 2 - gonzo4201

Line 3 - joabizz

Line 4 - seekerovtruth

Line 5 - gonzo4201

Line 6 - gonzo4201

Line 7 - seekerovtruth

Line 8 - run4w4ytr4in

Line 9 - mcihellejane

Line 10 - run4w4ytr4in

Line 11 - sixtiesdoll

Line 12 - seekerovtruth

Line 13 - Pikkakard

Line 14 - gonzo4201

Line 15 - gonzo4201

Line 16 - run4w4ytr4in

Line 17 - seekerovtruth

Line 18 - run4w4ytr4in

Line 19 - gonzo4201

Line 20 - Pikkakard

 

Thank you all for your continued support!

These are such fun to put together especially when I have such creative poets supplying me my pieces.

If you participated in this venture,

please feel free to post this completed poem on your page if you so choose. (with credits of course)

When you view this completed version,

please make suggestions for the first line of

Let’s Build a Poem Together FOUR

and a rhyme scheme to follow if you so desire.

I’ll keep doing them as long as you keep playing.

It’s my pleasure to work with you all!!!

YOU GUYS ROCK!

Peace June  J  

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On February 20th 2008 seekerovtruth Said :
seekerovtruth Let's Build a Poem Together 4 is posted. Come join the fun. :) Thanks!!! June
On February 20th 2008 gonzo4201 Said :
gonzo4201 ABCB
On February 20th 2008 Pikkakard Said :
Pikkakard So if ABAB is 1 rhymes with 3 and 2 rhymes with 4, and if AABB is 1 rhymes with 2 and 3 with 4, what is it when 1 and 3 don't rhyme, but 2 and 4 do?
This is how most of mine are written.
On February 20th 2008 seekerovtruth Said :
seekerovtruth 13 and 20 are your favorites eh Pikkakard. hahaha Good morning all.
On February 20th 2008 Pikkakard Said :
Pikkakard Great poem. lol

I especially like lines 13 and 20 ;)

On February 20th 2008 run4w4ytr4in Said :
run4w4ytr4in if you fancy another funny one how about " the sunshine blinds me, oh no i cant see" can make it theamed about mishaps in n aabb format?
On February 20th 2008 seekerovtruth Said :
seekerovtruth Shall we do another? This one came out very cute and was a hoot to put together! :) Thank you so much for joining in. A friend of mine (InvisibleFlame) has asked start one on her page and if you like doing these I ask that you support her joint creation as well. It’s called Community Poem. Peace to you all! June
On February 20th 2008 mcihellejane Said :
mcihellejane The moon beams dance across the water's edge.....
On February 20th 2008 mcihellejane Said :
mcihellejane I love it! It deserves a good laugh~