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Created on 5-11-08
There was a time in my life
When I truly believed I loved you
More than anything else in the world
But your love soon became a knife
And it was my blood it drew
Your wrath then began to unfurl
I was dying, stabbed by your wicked heart
You were lying, playing on my dreams.
When I had nothing more left to give,
I ran far from you even as I was falling apart
The times we shared were marred, ripped at the seams
It was not something I wanted to relive
The wind at my back pushed me forward
Though I did not know what I was heading toward
All I knew was that I had to get away
I wouldn’t listen to anything you tried to say
Your begging was whiny and annoying
Insistent as you were, I saw it as toying
Ten years later, I came back much stronger
Your fortified walls were seemingly no longer
I saw you as weak and poor, no confidence on your shoulders
In my memory, you had been much bolder
Now you stood with your hands at your sides and back hunched over
You could not have looked any older
Sympathetic as I felt, I shook my head
In my mind, I had kept you dead
Neither help nor heart was offered
I merely smiled sadly at how much our futures differed
How time went by changed us from our past
I was hardly surprised how short yours had last.
By Aimee Lew
(May 10/11, 2008) 1:43am
When I truly believed I loved you
More than anything else in the world
But your love soon became a knife
And it was my blood it drew
Your wrath then began to unfurl
I was dying, stabbed by your wicked heart
You were lying, playing on my dreams.
When I had nothing more left to give,
I ran far from you even as I was falling apart
The times we shared were marred, ripped at the seams
It was not something I wanted to relive
The wind at my back pushed me forward
Though I did not know what I was heading toward
All I knew was that I had to get away
I wouldn’t listen to anything you tried to say
Your begging was whiny and annoying
Insistent as you were, I saw it as toying
Ten years later, I came back much stronger
Your fortified walls were seemingly no longer
I saw you as weak and poor, no confidence on your shoulders
In my memory, you had been much bolder
Now you stood with your hands at your sides and back hunched over
You could not have looked any older
Sympathetic as I felt, I shook my head
In my mind, I had kept you dead
Neither help nor heart was offered
I merely smiled sadly at how much our futures differed
How time went by changed us from our past
I was hardly surprised how short yours had last.
By Aimee Lew
(May 10/11, 2008) 1:43am
Please Login to post comments| On June 30th 2008 kissofasia Said : | |
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yep,this is really good.I think everyone can relate to this.It made me cry,remind me of someone.... |
| On June 14th 2008 muse4apoem Said : | |
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This is really good! Strong and wonderful! :) |
| On May 14th 2008 drummajorpod Said : | |
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When the weak become strong.. that is a day of reckoning for many people in this world. Excellent work! |
| On May 14th 2008 chickenbroth Said : | |
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I love the complicated stanzas. Wonderful. |
| On May 13th 2008 heatherhotpant Said : | |
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LOVE IT it reminds me of my ex-husband |
| On May 12th 2008 guiltyasgod Said : | |
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i deffinetly felt something |
| On May 12th 2008 xHickChick789x Said : | |
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Hey, I really like this. *thumbs up* Keep it up! |
| On May 12th 2008 jwoody1980 Said : | |
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very good |
| On May 12th 2008 Smarties4 Said : | |
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I love it! It's simple in words and style but it shows a lot of strength and learning by the character. Awesome poem!! :) |
| On May 11th 2008 Babydotz Said : | |
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Very good word choice. I like this very strong in many ways. Keep writing. I like this style |
| On May 11th 2008 xXPunkGirl09Xx Said : | |
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I love when you desbribe very beautifully. I like how u stand for yourself and it is powerfully beautiful poem I love it. Thing have to change in reality.. |
| On May 11th 2008 Thugnastay227 Said : | |
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this is good and wow...it was good and wow....wow this is a good i enjoyed reading this and i can relate . thanks for sharing with me. |
| On May 11th 2008 deadpoet Said : | |
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wow this reminds me of my mom and i...unfortunately i think that's how it will be. great poem |
