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I wrote this w/my bf late one nightRate this Poem
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Created on 1-29-07
I look to the worldSo cold and blueI feel it,emtpy without you I walk the streetsso misty and greylooking for someonethrough all the decay I board the trollyand look towards the seawhere I find the scarlet sun setting before me I long to visitthat golden shoreTo lay beside the oneWhom I adore So I travelalong this bumpy brown roadholding onUntil it's finally slowed I arriveat the heavenly white beachbut find it,just slightly out of my reach before me standsa black iron gatetowering over meBriming with hate Beyond it's borderI can finally seeYou standing thereholding the silver key You open the doorinviting me insideI walk through the black gateMy fear, finally, having died
Please Login to post comments| On July 7th 2007 brokenwing3 Said : | |
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again you blow my mind |
| On July 2nd 2007 mcihellejane Said : | |
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I like the way you used simple words to describe you surroundings like trolley, sea, shore, gate but then packed complex emotion into it. I love it~ |
| On April 1st 2007 knowlyfe Said : | |
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Hey! i wrote like a paragraph comment and the stupid puter only said i wrote aww. i like it..anyway i said that the smile i made, thats what my face looked like at the end of it..and i said other stuff too, all posi. but im not ganna retype it. =] |
| On April 1st 2007 knowlyfe Said : | |
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aww! i like it =D |
| On March 14th 2007 onaipwolf Said : | |
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As an explanation, it kind of relates to my other poem...this is what happens if the hope of love isn't broken... |
| On March 13th 2007 xxcassiejayxx Said : | |
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like the last person said, what causes the fear? it's a very well written poem though |
| On February 7th 2007 matabooa Said : | |
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nice thats good but what causes that fear ?
are you afread of what is behind that door in real life? |
| On January 29th 2007 CHICKA6789 Said : | |
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wow!! this is really nice. |
