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Drunken Love

Views (334) Tragedy Created on 12-30-07 Flag

Drunk as hell

About to pass out

Swaying from side to side

That’s what it’s all about.

 

 Exiting the party

Saying your last goodbyes

Your boyfriend calls saying

“Don’t feed me the lies.”

 

Shouting and screaming

You swear

That you’re sound asleep

In your bed, chanting prayers

 

“I’m coming to find you

When I do, you better be sober

Or else I promise you

We are over.”

 

You see doubles

As you slide into the seat of the car

Starting the engine

You promise you are.

 

On the road

Dancing from lane to lane

Drivers start wondering

If you are sane.

 

You whisper “I love you.”

Two drivers are about to clash

Veering left,

With another driver you crash.

 

Cars stop; paramedics are called

Getting placed into cars.

Before you black out,

You see stars.

 

Waking up later

To white lights

You squint your eyes

Because it’s bright

 

A nurse rushes in

To ask if you’re okay

“What happened?”

Is all you can weakly say

 

Looking down at you in pity she says,

“Sweetheart, you were in a crash”

Thinking back, all you can remember

Is a great big flash

 

“With who?”

You curiously replied

Sadly the nurse says,

“We do not know, he has not been identified.”

 

“Can I see him?”

You ask as you start to shake

“Sure,” She replies,

“Though he is dead, he won’t ever wake.”

 

Hopping on her crutches, she has broken her leg.

You start walking on the hospital floor.

One, two, three, four,

You slowly start to open the door.

 

Seeing a white sheet placed over his head,

Regret and shame fills you

You draw back the sheet

Wondering who got killed, just who

 

A loud gasp erupts from you

You realize it was your boyfriend.

Tears pour out

To what seems like no end.

 

How could I do this to him?

You caress his dead face.

He had told you he was coming to look for you

And you had been in a blind, car race.

 

Slightly dazed,

The nurse snaps you

Out of a trance

She says his last words were, “I love you too.”

 

Your hand flies to your mouth

As sobs escape into the air

Through your whole life

This guilt you will have to bear.

 

Glancing down at his lifeless body,

The feeling of loneliness has already begun.

You’ll always keep wondering this:

Was it ever worth a night of fun?

 

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On July 7th 2008 cookiesweet33 Said :
cookiesweet33 Great poem! Simple love it!
On April 28th 2008 spiduhhxxfunk Said :
spiduhhxxfunk great, but depressing
On April 3rd 2008 bikerrylan79 Said :
bikerrylan79 ill bet you have a missrible life... oh and btw this seriosly sucks.. you should work on your writing..
On March 12th 2008 veronicavanity Said :
veronicavanity Daaamn. Creepy But really good... ...Man, what are the chances?
On March 9th 2008 professormcgee Said :
professormcgee i really ejoyed this, it was pretty kickass
On March 3rd 2008 xXPunkGirl09Xx Said :
xXPunkGirl09Xx Wow this poem is good. Love it comment my poems if u get a chance.
On January 6th 2008 jennaferz Said :
jennaferz woww, this is incredible..i am tearing up. its so emotion-jerking..not sure if thats a word but it is now. =]]
On January 2nd 2008 emohairlove Said :
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This is really sad. But I love it! Great Job!
On January 2nd 2008 xXcaitlin13Xx Said :
xXcaitlin13Xx seriously amazing. and quite sad.
On January 1st 2008 soccer4world Said :
soccer4world this is very sad but very good awsome poem =]
On January 1st 2008 DeathMetalPunk Said :
DeathMetalPunk Awesome! But I don't like it when poems end like "it was her boyfriend" but oh well. Yea my brother's best friend killed himself drunk driving after angering his friends, getting angry at his girlfriend, hitting her, she kicked him out of the apartment, he went for a drive and hit a tree. He was a good person, he just had trouble with his anger.
On January 1st 2008 RobinSlim Said :
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this is very good... i thought it was gonna b funny w/ the title drunken love tho =[
On December 30th 2007 zomgitzwendyxD Said :
zomgitzwendyxD this is great, i love it :]
On December 30th 2007 pellagirl933 Said :
pellagirl933 omg! this is wonderful!!
On December 30th 2007 cursedxisxwhat Said :
cursedxisxwhat aw so good.
On December 30th 2007 brainxxinsane Said :
brainxxinsane it's really good...i like the whole story aspect but why does it go from'she' to 'you' i love it though
On December 30th 2007 rebeldork2 Said :
rebeldork2 oh my gosh this is awsome i luv it .... really good
On December 30th 2007 necrosiss Said :
necrosiss Remember, this is all copyrighted so please don't use without my permission. Thank you.
On December 30th 2007 raetakeninluv1 Said :
raetakeninluv1 i like it
On December 30th 2007 Avisgirl5874 Said :
Avisgirl5874 That was really good and If you truly wrote this yourself then maybe you should write poems to be published!
On December 30th 2007 tillymaymopop Said :
tillymaymopop this is so wonderful