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Saying your last goodbyes...Rate this Poem
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Count Till Ten |
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The One Broken Heart No One Can See. |
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In this room, there lies a girl.. |
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All This Hurt. |
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Heart on my Sleeve. |
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Drunken Love |
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His fist, Her face. |
Drunken Love
Drunk as hell
About to pass out
Swaying from side to side
That’s what it’s all about.
Exiting the party
Saying your last goodbyes
Your boyfriend calls saying
“Don’t feed me the lies.”
Shouting and screaming
You swear
That you’re sound asleep
In your bed, chanting prayers
“I’m coming to find you
When I do, you better be sober
Or else I promise you
We are over.”
You see doubles
As you slide into the seat of the car
Starting the engine
You promise you are.
On the road
Dancing from lane to lane
Drivers start wondering
If you are sane.
You whisper “I love you.”
Two drivers are about to clash
Veering left,
With another driver you crash.
Cars stop; paramedics are called
Getting placed into cars.
Before you black out,
You see stars.
Waking up later
To white lights
You squint your eyes
Because it’s bright
A nurse rushes in
To ask if you’re okay
“What happened?”
Is all you can weakly say
Looking down at you in pity she says,
“Sweetheart, you were in a crash”
Thinking back, all you can remember
Is a great big flash
“With who?”
You curiously replied
Sadly the nurse says,
“We do not know, he has not been identified.”
“Can I see him?”
You ask as you start to shake
“Sure,” She replies,
“Though he is dead, he won’t ever wake.”
Hopping on her crutches, she has broken her leg.
You start walking on the hospital floor.
One, two, three, four,
You slowly start to open the door.
Seeing a white sheet placed over his head,
Regret and shame fills you
You draw back the sheet
Wondering who got killed, just who
A loud gasp erupts from you
You realize it was your boyfriend.
Tears pour out
To what seems like no end.
How could I do this to him?
You caress his dead face.
He had told you he was coming to look for you
And you had been in a blind, car race.
Slightly dazed,
The nurse snaps you
Out of a trance
She says his last words were, “I love you too.”
Your hand flies to your mouth
As sobs escape into the air
Through your whole life
This guilt you will have to bear.
Glancing down at his lifeless body,
The feeling of loneliness has already begun.
You’ll always keep wondering this:
Was it ever worth a night of fun?
| On July 7th 2008 cookiesweet33 Said : | |
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Great poem! Simple love it! |
| On April 28th 2008 spiduhhxxfunk Said : | |
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great, but depressing |
| On April 3rd 2008 bikerrylan79 Said : | |
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ill bet you have a missrible life... oh and btw this seriosly sucks.. you should work on your writing.. |
| On March 12th 2008 veronicavanity Said : | |
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Daaamn.
Creepy
But really good...
...Man, what are the chances? |
| On March 9th 2008 professormcgee Said : | |
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i really ejoyed this, it was pretty kickass |
| On March 3rd 2008 xXPunkGirl09Xx Said : | |
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Wow this poem is good. Love it comment my poems if u get a chance. |
| On January 6th 2008 jennaferz Said : | |
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woww, this is incredible..i am tearing up. its so emotion-jerking..not sure if thats a word but it is now. =]] |
| On January 2nd 2008 emohairlove Said : | |
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This is really sad. But I love it! Great Job! |
| On January 2nd 2008 xXcaitlin13Xx Said : | |
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seriously amazing. and quite sad. |
| On January 1st 2008 soccer4world Said : | |
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this is very sad but very good awsome poem =] |
| On January 1st 2008 DeathMetalPunk Said : | |
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Awesome! But I don't like it when poems end like "it was her boyfriend" but oh well. Yea my brother's best friend killed himself drunk driving after angering his friends, getting angry at his girlfriend, hitting her, she kicked him out of the apartment, he went for a drive and hit a tree. He was a good person, he just had trouble with his anger. |
| On January 1st 2008 RobinSlim Said : | |
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this is very good... i thought it was gonna b funny w/ the title drunken love tho =[ |
| On December 30th 2007 zomgitzwendyxD Said : | |
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this is great, i love it :] |
| On December 30th 2007 pellagirl933 Said : | |
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omg! this is wonderful!! |
| On December 30th 2007 cursedxisxwhat Said : | |
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aw so good.
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| On December 30th 2007 brainxxinsane Said : | |
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it's really good...i like the whole story aspect but why does it go from'she' to 'you'
i love it though |
| On December 30th 2007 rebeldork2 Said : | |
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oh my gosh this is awsome i luv it .... really good |
| On December 30th 2007 necrosiss Said : | |
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Remember, this is all copyrighted so please don't use without my permission. Thank you. |
| On December 30th 2007 raetakeninluv1 Said : | |
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i like it |
| On December 30th 2007 Avisgirl5874 Said : | |
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That was really good and If you truly wrote this yourself then maybe you should write poems to be published! |
| On December 30th 2007 tillymaymopop Said : | |
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this is so wonderful |


