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The Preditor (Newest Poem)
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Created on 6-19-08
This was a little bit Inspired by the story "a Taste For Blood." (By Jwalker2408)
The Preditor
I just looked at you so innocently.
But your looking at me differently.
Your mind is not thinking rationally.
I use my long mane so you will not see.
Your eyes are fixed on the hunt.
"You do not want me for Im the runt."
My heart beats faster from the chase.
As my fear shows upon my face.
I loose my balance so suddenly.
You have your pray finallly.
Your smile still lingers so viciously.
As love pounces and takes a bite out of me.
Please Login to post comments| On August 20th 2008 chinadoll1215 Said : | |
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Wonderful. Simply wonderful. :) |
| On July 16th 2008 stef4732 Said : | |
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This is great :) |
| On July 7th 2008 EvilRaven9892 Said : | |
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oh wow that was jus wow |
| On July 3rd 2008 gotmilk1994 Said : | |
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WOW.... it makes me think of all the players and untrue men out there, sad but you wrote it so wonderfully =] |
| On June 28th 2008 petersonsv Said : | |
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I liked it |
| On June 27th 2008 MCRsLover Said : | |
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totally makes me think of vampires!! |
| On June 27th 2008 mydragonlord Said : | |
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Aww i liked this one!!! |
| On June 24th 2008 hpfan731 Said : | |
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wow, i don't know what to say....it gave chills down my back!! |
| On June 23rd 2008 Laralei Said : | |
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Sorry for the delay - Definitely enjoyed this one. Glad to have you back ^_^ |
| On June 22nd 2008 breepers Said : | |
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wow i really liked it.it was nice.good poem |
| On June 22nd 2008 Thugnastay227 Said : | |
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very well done. i like it |
| On June 20th 2008 petersonsv Said : | |
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I like this it's good :) |
| On June 20th 2008 chayeah22 Said : | |
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It could be pray and not prey! Gives it character! Lol. Love it! an like deadpoet I can't think to write a good comment. |
| On June 20th 2008 max5892 Said : | |
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oh wow..i love it!! i love jwalker's story also so it makes even more sense!! lol...sry but im a bit particular about spelling..its "prey" not "pray"...awsome though!! |
| On June 20th 2008 liz720614 Said : | |
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wow, very good. i love it:] |
| On June 20th 2008 FireAngel420 Said : | |
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that was a very good poem but maybe put a little more discription in it but I need to work on things like that also :) good job |
| On June 20th 2008 muse4apoem Said : | |
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Yes I need all the help I can get with writing! Thank you all for the honsety! :) |
| On June 20th 2008 sixtiesdoll Said : | |
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I like this style for you. I love the poem. It can be taken in lots of ways. That's cool how you did it. `HUGS~ |
| On June 19th 2008 orangefizzpop Said : | |
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ah, just lovely. hehe :)) |
| On June 19th 2008 CSLimeWriter Said : | |
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In your second line it should grammatically be "you're". But other than that I really really like it! |
| On June 19th 2008 tiffany1058 Said : | |
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love it |
| On June 19th 2008 gonzo4201 Said : | |
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nicely done, could use a bit of cleaning up, maybe describe what is goin on a bit more, plus spelling, but that is a peeve of mine anyways. |
| On June 19th 2008 JWalker2406 Said : | |
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Aw!! Inspired by my story!! -Feels all humble inside- Thanks Lizzy, this is a great poem and really does go wonderfully with my story! Awesome choice of words, everything just flows...-Two thumbs up as well!- |
| On June 19th 2008 xHickChick789x Said : | |
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oh wow I really really like this one. :) *2 thumbs up* |
| On June 19th 2008 Pikkakard Said : | |
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Like the way this is written. Very good poem. |
