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The Rapture From His Poison
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Created on 3-13-08
I Wrote this a little bit later after "The Taste Of Pure Sweet Poison." Since everyone liked it. One person said though That I have written better. Whatever the case I guess I'll post the follow up to it!
The Rapture From His Poison
His sweet brown venomous eyes stare apon me.
But his gentel face is so alluring.
Put your evil lips on mine.
Let me taste your poison that I'm thirsting for.
He has constriced my heart and my mind.
He has got me wrapped up so tight that he is all I think about.
Please Login to post comments| On June 20th 2008 max5892 Said : | |
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i like it! |
| On April 15th 2008 Thugnastay227 Said : | |
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i like them equally |
| On March 23rd 2008 Thuggishone Said : | |
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Passes you some love potion instead maybe this may work better then poison me thinks...I would have to say they have a simular outlook on things so I would have to say there both great. william |
| On March 21st 2008 chinadoll1215 Said : | |
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I like them both :]
Maybe this one is better, by a little.
great job! |
| On March 13th 2008 PeterSteeleYum Said : | |
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I likes! |
| On March 13th 2008 stef4732 Said : | |
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I love them both but i like the flow of this one better :) |
| On March 13th 2008 sixtiesdoll Said : | |
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I LOVE them both~ Still this one pulls it all together, I love the wording. It just flows~ I also agree with micellejane:) |
| On March 13th 2008 mcihellejane Said : | |
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I love this. It feels dangerous. Something dark yet alluring waits...Nicely done! |
| On March 13th 2008 EvilRaven9892 Said : | |
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ooooo tis great! |
| On March 13th 2008 RealFiction616 Said : | |
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I like this one a lot better. I think that I might have been that one person ,sorry if it hurt your feelings but it kind of rubs me wrong when I know someone can write better, I love when people tell me the same cuz it makes me wrote better, anyway I'm writing to much. I loved this one a lot better though |
| On March 13th 2008 muse4apoem Said : | |
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So Which poem do you like best this one or "The Taste Of Pure Sweet Poison?" |
