lisaljb

Deep thinking(comments/criticism)

+10

My Poems

+23

I rather

Views (91)

Created on 3-7-08

Flag

I rather walk the unfamiliar roads
And trip and fall
Then stroll through the familiar
Without a stumble
At all

I prefer to sketch a caring heart
Rather then sketch an icing heart
That may as well break
The tip of my pencil

I rather die alone in my sleep
Then have someone suffer
From a terrible tragedy

I prefer to wonder about my dreams
Whereas living it will ruin the moral meaning

At times
I tend to wish beyond belief
Without any thinking
Of those who wish that they could be me

Emotion to me
Is something I need
Feelings
Is what can endanger me

I rather open up deep
Rather then throw some lies
From other cheesy lines
This poem is based
On what I have become to be

And as I sit here and ponder
A developing question in mind
Do I have the strength within me
In order to succeed?

Please Login to post comments

On March 18th 2008 xkatelynex Said :

	VERY well written [:! much better than i could ever do! let me know when you have more poems up. :].

On March 9th 2008 comacozi101 Said :

	all your poems are unique and deep. I like how you put yourself into this poem and the reader can tell you put alot of thought into it. amazing job.

On March 8th 2008 cloud132475860 Said :

	Great i love your work!XD you even went all out on the advertising lol adding hyperlinks and crap haha

On March 8th 2008 seekerovtruth Said :

	Oh my gosh Lisa where do I start. This is wonderful!!! It’s well written, insightful, packed full of thoughts to ponder and by far one of my favorite poems I read in here for awhile. If I started pointing out the lines I liked best I would end up pasting the whole poem here. lol TOTALLY LOVED IT!