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The little Boy's Christmas List |
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Our lines and cracks. |
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We Understand............. |
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I Cry for no Sympathy. |
Our lines and cracks.
I look out the window in a strong growing gaze,
The rain rushing down in a painfull, haze.
No need to fear what comes after this,
it will all be left in a puddle of reminisce.
Think to myself what to look forward to,
Or how to see or what to do.
The clouds start to form fiercly gray,
Stubbornly striving to never go away.
Staring stronger at the glass the window defines
Justifying the cracks and the small lines.
Rain drops shattering loud and clear,
Wanting to get in with profound fear.
A dismay reflection appears in the window,
A strong dissapointment it seems to shadow.
A thought of anger or maybe courage I see,
Quickly overtaken with rage; like disgusting debris.
Inhaling a breath as if to erase,
the constant disapointment and disgrace.
Justifiying myself like the window cracks,
No point to worry now as i just try to relax.
The time will come and I will be set free,
Scars on my arms for everone to see.
The line on the window stops in the center,
As a sign of progression like a continous mentor.
I look back out the window then at my wrists,
Suddenly I fill with anger and clench my fist.
Relizing the reasoning of my self inflictaion.
Its just like the window with justification.
It makes sense to me now the cracks and line,
If its not fixed the glass will shatter in time.
my heart and my wrists; may have a perment scar
but here in this place freedom wont be far.
A shelter full of nurses and doctors for my cure,
When really its my heart that has gained the fear.
But everyone has lines and a occassional crack to leap,
It's simply a matter of saving them before the're too deep.
| On July 18th 2007 FruitPunch15 Said : | |
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beautiful work |
| On July 16th 2007 Eminembitch23 Said : | |
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you are an amazing writer!!!! |
| On July 13th 2007 amanda710faith Said : | |
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well i dont know what to say to change.
absolutely perfect
u are a great writer
for sure
=D |
| On July 13th 2007 Javellef Said : | |
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Beautiful! I love this poem because it shows that despite deep pain that you can find hope and healing. |
| On July 13th 2007 autrydennis Said : | |
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awesome , really awesome |
| On July 12th 2007 kcollier3211 Said : | |
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U R GREAT!! DO U HAVE NE iDEA HOW GOOD U ARE..? i LOVE LOVE LOVE THiS ONE!! :D |
| On July 12th 2007 LinLin030988 Said : | |
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Lovely Job Hun, great use of metaphore. It's nice to see a poem of hope instead of despair. ^_^ You have to keep me informed of your new posts. |
| On July 11th 2007 joabizz Said : | |
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Great expression! Great Job!! |
| On July 11th 2007 PoeticPang Said : | |
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*applause*,, XD........ wonderful,, simply wonderful,, the imagery is just wow,,, comes out so fluidly with each description,,,, 'mazing,,,, the ending of all,, ^____^ is just,, ,, superb,,,,,,,, fantastic-excellent job!.., i enjoyed this one,,, best so far that i've read,, i'm abit envious,, lol,,, it's really really really great tho,, SUGOY!!! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Pang |
| On July 10th 2007 California1516 Said : | |
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this is deep..i love how u used a window to describe alot of things....this is a good poem |
| On July 10th 2007 HicChic93 Said : | |
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Love it lots! |
| On July 10th 2007 barbaraew Said : | |
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wow alot a feeling in this one |
| On July 9th 2007 mcihellejane Said : | |
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I really liked this one-your thoughts go very deep and hold so much truth! I loved your words and phrasing as well! |
| On June 29th 2007 wannabetimthe1 Said : | |
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i like the poem its good for some reason it just couldn't hold my attention.....its more than likely me i'm just tired.....keep up the good work |
| On June 28th 2007 xxcassiejayxx Said : | |
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beautiful |
| On May 4th 2007 ausjo Said : | |
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Lovely work. |
| On May 4th 2007 Lindseyk1989 Said : | |
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gr8 job! ♥ me |


