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Created on 10-14-07
The wind is whipping you across the face
The rain pouring down upon you
The waves thrasing wildly against your ship
Rocking it dangerlously
Your crew and you fight with all your might
Until finaly you make it to the eye of the storm
The sun shining down on your face
The ocean calm
Please Login to post comments| On January 24th 2008 jetkills Said : | |
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^_^ kewl |
| On January 23rd 2008 fawzia11 Said : | |
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I like it!
You should take a look at some of my poems and tell me what you think! Maybe if you look at other people's poems you'll get an idea. I just write my poems from memories,experiences,and a little bit of fantasy is in there too sometimes. |
| On January 2nd 2008 LordLazarus Said : | |
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i have a few poems like this one. I'll upload them for you to see. |
| On December 23rd 2007 perdylilpyro Said : | |
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this is fantastic. your poems don't really draw in your readers emotions(almost like a letter written to someone else), this is not something you need to change, but certainly something to explore in the future |
| On December 18th 2007 TJ1001 Said : | |
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ohh thts good |
| On November 25th 2007 lilangel1301 Said : | |
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it was good |
| On October 14th 2007 jenluvblue Said : | |
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thank you |
| On October 14th 2007 xXFARYLUVXx Said : | |
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it was ok for ur first time. |
