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You Don't Care
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Created on 1-17-08
Between you and me, the love was more than enough.
All of the lying and trying
Just ended in dying and crying.
But you were friendly.
You were lovely.
It started fantastic,
But it was only pathetic.
We had a wish.
It felt so bliss.
Then you said “whatever”
About us being together.
All of the rush
Came to a hush.
But the tingle
Was beautiful.
I wanted.
I hunted.
Our love was strong, long,
But wrong.
Our feelings were shared.
We cared.
You said we had to wait
And you began to hate.
The things you said made me weak.
Rivers ran down my cheek.
You told me goodbye
And that we couldn’t try.
You said that I was to blame.
I felt nothing but shame.
When we first met
My body was wet.
You gave me a giant lovely shiver.
You were such a giver.
And now me
Is what you don’t want to see.
After hearing that from you,
My feelings became few.
He said that there needed to be a lot of space
Between his and my face.
I can’t bear
How you don’t care.
All of the lying and trying
Just ended in dying and crying.
But you were friendly.
You were lovely.
It started fantastic,
But it was only pathetic.
We had a wish.
It felt so bliss.
Then you said “whatever”
About us being together.
All of the rush
Came to a hush.
But the tingle
Was beautiful.
I wanted.
I hunted.
Our love was strong, long,
But wrong.
Our feelings were shared.
We cared.
You said we had to wait
And you began to hate.
The things you said made me weak.
Rivers ran down my cheek.
You told me goodbye
And that we couldn’t try.
You said that I was to blame.
I felt nothing but shame.
When we first met
My body was wet.
You gave me a giant lovely shiver.
You were such a giver.
And now me
Is what you don’t want to see.
After hearing that from you,
My feelings became few.
He said that there needed to be a lot of space
Between his and my face.
I can’t bear
How you don’t care.
Please Login to post comments| On February 2nd 2008 lisaljb Said : | |
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This rhymed so well, and you wrote it when you were younger then 14, I thought this is pretty good, well done! |
| On February 2nd 2008 seekerovtruth Said : | |
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Young love is so fickle. Oh who I am kidding, all love is fickle to a point. haha Sorry to not be giving you much hope here. lol It's better to have loved and lost than to never have loved at all. There, how's that? :) |
| On January 17th 2008 i2am2hayley2PM Said : | |
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not really...i wrote this a few years ago actually. it's not too great, but it meant something to me at the time. |
| On January 17th 2008 foreverjason Said : | |
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and you're only 14? you must have a lot of time on your hands lately... |
