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a poem of sorts that I wrote years agoRate this Poem
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I Close My Door
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Created on 8-16-07
Dont't want to hear all the shit
Don't want to be online
Don't want to be left with my own mind
Don't want to feel like an outsider in my own body
Don't want to feel alone in a house full of people
Do they see me
I see them
But am I really there
Am I just a mind game
Everyone is playing on me , on you
Can you see me cause I see you
Do you see through me
Every breath I take , is it real
Or is it my last one
Do you see me , do you feel me
I feel like I'm in a fog
Like I am in a bottle looking out
Help me get out of this bottle , I call my life
Don't make me talk if I don't feel like it
Would anyone notice if I stopped talking
I feel so alone with only my thoughts to keep me company
Don't you ever just want to blink and be gone
To be someone else , for a little while
To sleep to dream? , like a normal person
Do you hear me
Are you listening to me
Sinking deep
I feel like I am a shell of my once self
Smile some other day
Or maybe talk another day
Stay sane another day
Like a ship in a bottle floating away in the sea
A sea of souls
Please Login to post comments| On September 14th 2007 ducki69 Said : | |
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THIS POEM HAS NOTHING TO DO WITH BEING INSANE.IT IS ABOUT FEELING LIKE BEING A PRISONER IN YOUR OWN HOME,IN A HOUSE FULL OF PEOPLE. THE FEELING OF BEING ALONE... |
| On August 19th 2007 halfpint21106 Said : | |
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NO ONE SHOULD EVER HAVE TO FEEL THIS ALONE... I CANE TO YOUR RESCUE THOUGH & YOU WILL NEVER BE THAT ALONE AGAIN I PROMISE TO NEVER MAKE YOU FEEL THAT WAY EVER AGAIN.. I LOVE YOU WITH ALL MY HEART & SOUL NOW FOREVER & ALWAYS |
| On August 17th 2007 PoeticPang Said : | |
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very well written,, although i didn't like much of the beginning,, the repitition was annoying,, ,,, the flow was somewhat nice tho,, i'm really not sure what to say to help u,, tho i feel in this aching way at time too,,, i'll just leave u with this thought: if u want to be noticed, speak up... if u want to be left alone, just walk away... ........... ^__^ and also,, there is completely NOTHING WRONG with being insane.... insanity is just normality in disguise is it not???......... very good metaphores and similes,,, very well written,, tho could do with more profound vocabulary to entrance and give notice from the reader(s).... good job!~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Pang |
