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I wrote this 5 years ago.Rate this Poem
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Created:
05/21 2007
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291
Category:
Anger
My Poems
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11
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A Little Brothers Song |
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15
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Suicide |
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12
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Face On the Wall |
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9
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Troubles |
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4
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Amending |
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6
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Out Alive |
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6
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Unrefined Love |
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4
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Attetion To Life |
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4
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Falling For the Wrong Ones |
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11
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Happy New Year |
Suicide
I saw his face full of caged up fears
I saw the torture in his river of tears
When the weapon of death was at his heart
When he realized this is where the hurt had start
After the last gasp of anguish arose
After the last fault the mistaken teen chose
The world laughed coldly, he fell to his knees and died
As the devil and Legions rejoiced--it was suicide
Please Login to post comments| On November 15th 2009 megan0massacer Said: |
| Wow, I really like this. |
| On April 22nd 2009 sezziesezzso Said: |
| lyk it XP |
| On October 27th 2008 speederspider Said: |
| oh wow wow WOW! This one is really good. I wrote one about suicide once...this one is wonderful. |
| On October 26th 2008 JenMoe Said: |
| I like this one. I like the way it worked with couplets. |
| On October 17th 2008 dtsheep Said: |
| *unstructured poems, lol. freestyle all the way. |
| On October 17th 2008 dtsheep Said: |
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| You think this rhyme scheme is bad. I should post my un |
| On October 17th 2008 lyrikaldisastr Said: |
| at first i didnt think i was gonna like it that much but then i caught onto ur rhyme scheme and i liked the way it ended good *thumbs up* |
| On May 26th 2007 BillysGirl2005 Said: |
| very nice.. I liked it specially the last part because it's so true.. people just don't want to admit it |
| On May 21st 2007 londonchick50 Said: |
| Amazing poem, but very sad! |
