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Walk In My Shoes

Views (199) Pain Created on 5-22-08 Flag

Could you take a walk in my shoes?
A 9 1/2 inch bruise that won't turn blue
Not visible to the human eye
Resides inside my mind and outside
A smile appears for you to like
You call it beautiful, but I know the truth
Its an ugly lie with pretty teeth and smile lines
To show you.

Could you walk in my shoes?

A 9 1/2 inch scar that won't heal
Feels like a sharp knife stabbing my heel
And it kills me to live this life
But I'll tell you, "its no big deal, I'm fine"
I can handle myself since I've done so 17 years
And I don't shed tears since I have no fears
I'm independent, strong and don't need help
Yet inside I'm weak crying and I can't free myself

Could you walk in my shoes?

Details that would send chills down your spine
With a mother who has an insane wacked mind
And no father to be found for a child longing for one
Seeking out for family love, the only thing I want
Cocaine, molestation and prison all a part of my life
You couldn't walk in my shoes as I have and survive.

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On June 19th 2008 liz720614 Said :
liz720614 deep poem. ur a great writer. love ur poetry:)
On June 10th 2008 CharTheKnight Said :
CharTheKnight Very well thought out and very expressive. Keep up the good work :D!
On June 8th 2008 gonzo4201 Said :
gonzo4201 very wonderfully done
On June 8th 2008 AirplaneMan Said :
AirplaneMan I love it, it has a powerful message deep inside it that some might not see but it's there you can feel it....so sorry it took me so long...
On June 3rd 2008 vance4 Said :
vance4 wow nice work sweetheart! I have walked in your shoes and i too am a survivor. I am a very strong and powerful woman because of it all. always smile and keep your head up and learn to love yourself you too will see how strong and powerful you will become... if you haven't already.
On May 31st 2008 amptone Said :
amptone Wow, very deep and very chilling. Raw, real and it's the kind of poem that can easily be turned into a story. I can't find anything I dislike about your works so far :)
On May 29th 2008 kissofasia Said :
kissofasia as usual,its great.Write more poems my friend.
On May 28th 2008 gotmilk1994 Said :
gotmilk1994 WOW...that's all I can say. Great Fantastic Writing =]
On May 27th 2008 october1015 Said :
october1015 I'm speechless too.
On May 26th 2008 orangefizzpop Said :
orangefizzpop wait, woops the word was 'floored' lol, but yeah you get my point..
On May 26th 2008 orangefizzpop Said :
orangefizzpop unbelievably amazing. this is just so good! i'm grounded
On May 23rd 2008 lakeguy2302 Said :
lakeguy2302 I'd like to know more about the specifics of what motivated you to write this. I always identify with expressions of pain.
On May 23rd 2008 5cheychey5 Said :
5cheychey5 wow, that was POWERFUL. really good! very sad too, was it all true? wow, deep.
On May 23rd 2008 kinkybitch101 Said :
kinkybitch101 Wow!!! that is really good...i love it!!!
On May 23rd 2008 morbidangel585 Said :
morbidangel585 oh wow, greatest poem so far. many understand this im sure. love it twin =]
On May 23rd 2008 AnaAlicia07 Said :
AnaAlicia07 THIS POEM IS VERY DEEP ...LOVE IT....♥....
On May 23rd 2008 Angel2k11 Said :
Angel2k11 this poem...states everything and anything i would like to tell people who label, and have high expectations of me because of my parents...this poem is just POWERFUL...i am for reals it just hit me....like BOOM>...and i could say anything seriously...i almost cried HONESTLY!!! i LOVE it so much...you deserve something for such an amazing poem
On May 23rd 2008 chickp96 Said :
chickp96 I can't say anything that hasn't already been said
On May 23rd 2008 Thugnastay227 Said :
Thugnastay227 this is...indescribable....wow. powerful. i cant find the words powerful or eloquent enough to emphasize how much this hit me....wow. *super duper hiroshima atomic huggles*
On May 22nd 2008 lisaljb Said :
lisaljb I really enjoyed this one. I thought it's very true for everyone out there. All have different situations in life, but some are similar. Some may be able to walk in your shoes, they might trip and fall, but some have similar experiences as you. I can relate to a couple, perhaps a few or maybe none at all. I won't say, but good write, good write indeed!
On May 22nd 2008 jaylynn142434 Said :
jaylynn142434 i rlly like this one. its sad but so so good! teriffic job =]
On May 22nd 2008 lexiigurl345 Said :
lexiigurl345 cool
On May 22nd 2008 N5607 Said :
N5607 WOW
On May 22nd 2008 Laralei Said :
Laralei Wow. I'm speechless.