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Dense |
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Escape |
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Hate the Fakes |
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Horizon |
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This Bridge |
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This Ride |
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Godly Thoughts |
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I'll understand why. |
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An Urging Prayer in Poetry |
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The Mind of an Abuser |
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Momma, why...me? |
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EXPLODE |
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Spider WWW.eb |
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Recieve Me |
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Before You Take That Leap |
EXPLODE
Pain
hate
and tribulation
packed in a shell
Slug of anger
waiting
for the perfect chance to expel
This life is hell
and that’s just the way God said it would be
He’ll set me free
if I could just loosen the grip of my reality
This tragedy
has forged a deadly mechanism
capable of forcing fate
on any unsuspecting victim
I’m the definition
of how a man can lose control
Can’t seem to change
cause Satan’s got one hell of a hold
Emotions cold
and your ignorance builds vigor
You’ve chosen the wrong time to mold yourself into a trigger
I EXPLODE
NEXT SHELL RUNS DOUBLE TIME TO RELOAD
YOUR PUSHING BUTTONS
HAS FOUND A WAY TO HACK A MAD CODE
Please don’t worry
you won’t die
but you will learn a lesson
I possess enough restraint to keep from being too obssessant
but as a convalescent
you can think of what you’ve done
Maybe next time you’ll think
before you match wits with the crazy one
A demon’s son
someone who seems slow to react
when deep inside, he’s planning out his course of attack
Just watch your back
don’t corner people this unstable
If they respond
you’ll realize that this threat is not a fable
They are more than able
to watch your ignorance rise in vigor
Then the day that you mold yourself into a trigger
THEY EXPLODE
THEIR SHELLS RUN DOUBLE TIME TO RELOAD
YOUR PUSHING BUTTONS
HAS FOUND A WAY TO HACK A MAD CODE
Please think it through
Look in their eyes
Try to understand
just what pain may lie inside, behind that trembling hand
Maybe you can
stop and find a way to connect
instead of showing off your strength
trying to put them in check
Have some respect
because you never know
the trials they are facing
and the pain they can’t let go
Oh, no no no
Not all troubled people slit their wrist
Some will see your lack of tact
and mark you on a list
Remember this
You never know what kind of ignorance might be seen high in vigor
Causing them to shed their excess anger on a trigger
AND EXPLODE
| On May 5th 2007 Electronicmeds Said : | |
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you have a good twist to words... i like it.. |
| On April 23rd 2007 VerbalWeaponry Said : | |
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good stuff here i'd like to hear it..why does everyone think it is long? its not so shut the f up |
| On April 21st 2007 lestatinator Said : | |
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fucking freaking fucking schweet. im luvin this new poem. for some reason, it puts a smile on my face. well, more of a sarcastic smirk. but who gives a fuck what it is? U FUCKIN ROCK WITH UR POETIC SELF!!! KEEP ROCKIN THAT ASS!!!! |
| On April 21st 2007 KathLoOnie Said : | |
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| On April 21st 2007 tara62 Said : | |
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This writing is good, in that its disturbing, and emotionaly dark, if that was my reality i would be surely lost. |
| On April 21st 2007 sonicfalcan Said : | |
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I like it 7/10 |
| On April 21st 2007 rebelbabe1501 Said : | |
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isnt it amazing what the human mind can do? To have so many emotions that if you could really feel them all, you wouldn't be able to bear it. That is what this poem reminds me of. I love the way it's written. Awesome. |
| On April 21st 2007 Andreq92 Said : | |
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my life story. |
| On April 21st 2007 jewells716 Said : | |
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this is really really good. always good poetry coming from you're pen. keep it up. |
| On April 21st 2007 babyblue187954 Said : | |
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I really like this.. You did great.. |
| On April 21st 2007 sunny102 Said : | |
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I'm such a fan of your work:) I agree with marlana79, reminds me of Va. tech as well. Awesome job, James! |
| On April 21st 2007 Purp7eFi7th Said : | |
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wow this song is really fuckin' sick i love it : ) its awsome : P |
| On April 21st 2007 tswieberg Said : | |
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Long but very good. |
| On April 21st 2007 crotchrotwedgy Said : | |
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Yeah, I agree about the hook. I didn't feel it really came across the way I meant it to. I was thinking about taking it out completely after EXPLODE. Thanks for the insight though. |
| On April 21st 2007 marlana79 Said : | |
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I like it. I think it's well written. I would suggest that you change up the hook a little, it doesn't quite flow as well as the rest of the poem. Then again, it could be that I am reading it wrong. It kinda of reminds me of Virginia Tech. I am not sure if that's what you were going for.... I always love your poetry. It's beautiful.... |
| On April 21st 2007 lyssabean72792 Said : | |
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a lil long but good |
| On April 21st 2007 ivy81 Said : | |
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cool bit to long for me |
| On April 21st 2007 imbored9909 Said : | |
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nice... |


