Created By
Rate this Poem
|
+
14
|
Dense |
|
+
10
|
Escape |
|
+
10
|
Hate the Fakes |
|
+
14
|
Horizon |
|
+
11
|
This Bridge |
|
+
21
|
This Ride |
|
+
11
|
Godly Thoughts |
|
+
10
|
I'll understand why. |
|
+
18
|
An Urging Prayer in Poetry |
|
+
29
|
The Mind of an Abuser |
|
+
58
|
Momma, why...me? |
|
+
41
|
EXPLODE |
|
+
44
|
Spider WWW.eb |
|
+
9
|
Recieve Me |
|
+
49
|
Before You Take That Leap |
Horizon
Help me my mind is worn
Help me get away from this storm
I'm torn
Seen too much for my mind to mourn
What's going on
Just want to be gone
HORIZON
And if I could leave
I would never come back
Just knowing that
I had the wind on my back
And if I could see
Everything I could have
It would break my mind
Just knowing that
That if I could leave
I would never come back
Just knowing that
I had the wind on my back
And if I could re
Breathe every breath that I've had
I would only change
This life I've led
Just let me see over the ridge
That's all I've ever wanted to do
All I want is escape
If I could allow me to
But I don't know were to go
But I know I'd be more than happy to get there
Cause all time seems to show
Is why I don't want to stay here
Just let me getaway
From this town
From these people
From this hate
Of the ground I walk upon
Sick and tired of being down
Every time I see this place
Same old look on the face
Of every man I come across
I'm to strange
My minds a loss
But let me tell you this
I'm really getting sick of it
All this fucking hiss and tiss
I don't even give a shit
It's like the war between
The Capulets' and Montague's
And I don't have the time to choose
the side or weapon I should use
what the hell should I do
I've got nothing here left to lose
But I'm scared I'm gonna fail at whatever I'm trying to prove
Or how you spin it, or defin it
No life and no one in it
No troops to represent it
I'm scorn and it's definite
Please don't help me
Because I'm not trying to make it to the sun
Just need to focus my eyes
On the way
To my HORIZON
And if I could leave
I would never come back
Just knowing that
I had the wind on my back
And if I could see
Everything I could have
It would break my mind
Just knowing that
That if I could leave
I would never come back
Just knowing that
I had the wind on my back
And if I could re
Breathe every breath that I've had
I would only change
This life I've led
This is what I'm going through
This is what I see
This ain't what I want
And this ain't really where I need to be
But all these mother fuckers
Keep bringing me down hard
Trying to play the perfect hand
But keep laying the wrong cards
And I can't escape
Feel like I'm chained to the ground
Try to make a break for freedom
But I'm taunted my sounds
And the voices they produce
Won't stop putting me down
I sit and watch my path darken
Every time I look around
What's going on
Why can't I leave
My minds so strong
This place has so much to offer
But for me it's all wrong
So let it go
Cause that's the only answer I could find
The stop and rewind
Only triggers traps in my mind
And the lies
From every fucker I've ever known
I don't want to home
Cause torture is the lord on the thrown
On my own
Is were I want to be
Never do I want to see
These fake ass mother fuckers keep bringing this hate up out of me
An odyssey of pain
Won't stop pushing me to the gun
Just need to stop and think
And find a way
To my HORIZON
And if I could leave
I would never come back
Just knowing that
I had the wind on my back and if I could see
Everything I could have
It would break my mind
Just knowing that
That if I could leave
I would never come back
Just knowing that I had the wind on my back
And if I could re
Breathe every breath that I've had
I would only change
This life I've led
The only choice I've been given
Is to make it on my own
But what the fuck am I supposed to do
Just leave this hate at home
Hell no, I'll bring it to the world
And show these fuckers where I'm coming from
I'll prove to them that I can make it
No matter what high I'm on
Finally I see the horizon growing in my eyes
I see the pain and anguish of a million people staring at my prize
I've found what I've been looking for
Just got to let it run
Just need to know
That one day I'll see
My HORIZON
And if I could leave
I would never come back
Just knowing that
I had the wind on my back
And if I could see
Everything I could have
It would break my mind
Just knowing that
That if I could leave I would never come back
Just knowing that
I had the wind on my back
And if I could re
Breathe every breath that I've had
I would only change
This life I've led
| On July 5th 2007 PoeticPang Said : | |
|
|
besides a few mispelled words and obscurred thoughts,,,, the structure is very superb,,, it sort of reads like a journal or diary,,,, tho the few repeated lines would do good in a song,,, it's best as a poem ,,, it has a profound voice that isn't exaclty about ranting or complaining,, just,,, stating the facts and getting things out and not asking for help on these obstacles.... alot of regrets,,,, LOTS,,,,, and LOTS,,, it has great depth in ones own perspective and overall,, i'd say,,, it's a pretty catchy poem... the length makes it more meaningful and the reptitions in some lines just pulls the whole poem together,,, very good,,, great infact,,, great job!~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Pang |
| On April 26th 2007 jewells716 Said : | |
|
|
this.... is awesome. *applauds* WOOT WOOT! :D |
| On April 16th 2007 lyssabean72792 Said : | |
|
|
very well written. u should turn it into a song for sure! but i agree with paintshoppro, the point is a little harder to understand..but i still like it a lot. :D |
| On April 16th 2007 paintshoppro Said : | |
|
|
i actually like the other one better, because of the feeling captured in it. this one is a lil harder to relate to...because the point is a bit obscured..but i could definitely see it as a song id listen to :) |
| On April 16th 2007 dureall Said : | |
|
|
Schweet! |
| On April 16th 2007 LoralDojo Said : | |
|
|
yeah i like this one much better |


