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Views (183) Anger Created on 4-11-07 Flag

I like

Sex, drugs, rock & roll

To lose control

The fold for fold

To indulge the lost soul.

But what ever happened to the consequences

Seems to be too many fences

I don't give a fuck

I cut the brakes

I'm breaking through

Without pretences

Defenses

The rush engulfing all the senses

Your offensive convalescence

Offending only the dense

Is this your way of life

Or do you just lack the common sense

To see that you're a little minnow in this sea so immense

But it's you

Do you see who

That you do

Step up to

But still you choose

Even though the odds are way the fuck against you

You're gonna die

But if you survive

Over the past time

You'll lose your minds eye

So mother fucker cry

Cause I'm not gonna let you hack in

Or allow you to come back in

The fact that you got caught slackin

Should let catch on to the fact and

It's this

You're gonna get tossed in the abyss

And the only thought that you will have

Is to reminisce

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On July 5th 2007 PoeticPang Said :
PoeticPang hmmmm,, wow,, it is a rant,,, geesh,,, very harsh,, i feel bad for the person who this is meant for,,, ,,,, altho i wasn't gettin the catch in the beginning,,, i'm not so sure it goes with the ending well,, or am i interpreting this wrong?.... idk,, i do that sometimes,, it's a rough one to judge on,,,, so i'll just stop,,,, ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Pang
On April 19th 2007 EmilyAngora Said :
EmilyAngora HEy this i a really good poem I likes it..lol man Im going to have fun tommoro 420!!!!
On April 17th 2007 chickenbroth Said :
chickenbroth Great job dude, your a wonderful writter! This put alot of my deepest feelings into words. FAntastic job!!
On April 17th 2007 lestatinator Said :
lestatinator OH MY FUCKING SWEET JESUS MOTHER OF MERCY!!! ok, i know its bad to see fuck and jesus in the same sentence, but dude, thats how much im luvin the poem, it fucking blowing my sox off!!! and i agree with dureall, i would actually like to see it put to music. THIS POEM IS ROCKIN FUCKIN ASS!!!!
On April 16th 2007 dureall Said :
dureall I could see this put to music.