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Created on 12-10-07
Rain…
The thunder rolls
Vivid to my mind
As Heaven’s painful toll
Begins to unwind
The drops clash with the ground
The lightening begins to spring
My heart begins to pound
While catastrophe starts to sing
The water strikes my back
Feeling every painful burden
Every depraved attack
As Misery strikes again
I become one with the rain
Emotions fulfill me
As misery collaborates with pain
Revealing each appalling destiny
Each raindrop a tear
From heaven’s mound
Each drop a story
That simply isn’t heaven bound
To see the depth of tragedy
To feel the world’s misery
To watch the death of unfinished destiny
To see what God has to see…
Heaven’s crying
Is what we see as rain
Just another symbol of dying
Just another symbol of Pain.
Please Login to post comments| On January 8th 2008 evildarkness13 Said : | |
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holy sh--, this is good, really good, |
| On December 12th 2007 MrKeesee Said : | |
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This is really good, I'm glad you let me know it was up, Thanx =D |
| On December 10th 2007 amshaye Said : | |
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thats amazing. i ahve another new poem The Fight Within |
| On December 10th 2007 ThisIsTheDay Said : | |
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Wow. I really like this. Crit-instead of "Heaven bound", why not make it, "Heaven-Bound"? I see that as easier flowing and I think it looks better, but it's just a suggestion-either way works. ^^ I really liked this and I love the imagery in it and how powerful it is! Take a look at some of my work, pwease? Hehe. Thankiez. I love yewww!! |
| On December 10th 2007 amptone Said : | |
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Great flow |
| On December 10th 2007 SpiffyKnickers Said : | |
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woah. very... painful. |
| On December 10th 2007 lisaljb Said : | |
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Indeed very nice poems, keep it up! |
| On December 10th 2007 blahidyblah929 Said : | |
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im so jealous. my poems are never this good. |
| On December 10th 2007 transgenic Said : | |
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Love it! Great bittersweet feel to it, and great word choice! I especially love the forth stanza! |
| On December 10th 2007 ha7 Said : | |
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wow, I loved it! this poem was really really good! Congrats on another awsome poem |
