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BODY IN THE WATER |
BODY IN THE WATER
Body lying in the water
No movement or expression is shown
Body that no one has searched for
Body of someone unknown
There in the lake of disaster
That of which flows the stream of distress
Lies a body of a woman so stiff
She lies cold, not breathing, undressed
She lays waiting for someone to pick her up
And breathe into her the air that she fiends
Instead the cold air has frozen the waters
The wind around her never stopped being so keen
She lays soundly, her hair covers her face
She is so still, I believe she is dead
Her body is silent and steady
I can see the numbness of her head
Speak to me, move a little, and reach out your hand
A tear rolled down my face to join the ripples of the water she was in
The entire lake magically warmed up, the woman began rising out of the wetness
All she needed was for someone to care, emotion heartfelt and sincere
It saved her so powerfully, unexplainable, the way one can make another feel
| On January 23rd 2007 cutthatcity Said : | |
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It was great, a very nice start of things.
I felt you throughout, yet you had a few paradoxes here and there, and towards the end I felt it was too - direct, in explaining its meaning. Be a little more vague with your poems, you'll blossom into a beautiful writer. |


