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Something Weird
Now is the hour that I must feel
Now is the hour that I can’t deal.
Now is the hour that I must heal.
Now is the hour everything’s surreal.
Now I must learn how to cope.
Now I must learn how to hope.
Now I must learn not to mope.
Now I must avoid the dope.
In this time and place,
I must show my face,
In order to win the race,
I need to keep pace.
I feel as though there is nothing inside me.
I feel as though my body is empty.
I feel as though I cannot be.
I feel as though I’m not me.
I have nothing left to show.
I have no where to go.
I feel I should know,
Why I have nothing left to show.
| On May 17th 2008 mcihellejane Said : | |
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I really enjoyed this one. You did a great job with the rhyme. So many times w/ the mono rhyming stanzas people smoosh things together just to make the rhyme work, but your lines fit perfectly together. The emotions are clear and rich. Very nicely done. I think it worked well to break up the stanzas w/ the repeating beginnings w/ the other two stanzas. It really gave the poem a nice quality! I think you did a wonderful job all around with this one! |
| On May 6th 2008 godschild4974 Said : | |
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thanx for commenting my things.i really like this poem.
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| On May 6th 2008 godschild4974 Said : | |
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thanx for commenting my things.i really like this poem.
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| On March 25th 2008 sliversideup Said : | |
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i love this it has a very intreseting rhythem :) |
| On March 13th 2008 UnSane420 Said : | |
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this is awesome i love it |
| On March 5th 2008 seekerovtruth Said : | |
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You did a wonderful job with this. Rhyming every line can be difficult while still trying to maintain cohesiveness to the theme. You pulled it off quite nicely. Nice work! |
| On March 5th 2008 mydragonlord Said : | |
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Cleverly done, the rhyming and all. Good job!! |
| On March 5th 2008 muse4apoem Said : | |
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Good work! :) |


