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Now is the hour that I must feel

Now is the hour that I can’t deal.

Now is the hour that I must heal.

Now is the hour everything’s surreal.

 

Now I must learn how to cope.

Now I must learn how to hope.

Now I must learn not to mope.

Now I must avoid the dope.

 

In this time and place,

I must show my face,

In order to win the race,

I need to keep pace.

 

I feel as though there is nothing inside me.

I feel as though my body is empty.

I feel as though I cannot be.

I feel as though I’m not me.

 

I have nothing left to show.

I have no where to go.

I feel I should know,

Why I have nothing left to show.

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On May 17th 2008 mcihellejane Said :
mcihellejane I really enjoyed this one. You did a great job with the rhyme. So many times w/ the mono rhyming stanzas people smoosh things together just to make the rhyme work, but your lines fit perfectly together. The emotions are clear and rich. Very nicely done. I think it worked well to break up the stanzas w/ the repeating beginnings w/ the other two stanzas. It really gave the poem a nice quality! I think you did a wonderful job all around with this one!
On May 6th 2008 godschild4974 Said :
godschild4974 thanx for commenting my things.i really like this poem.
On May 6th 2008 godschild4974 Said :
godschild4974 thanx for commenting my things.i really like this poem.
On March 25th 2008 sliversideup Said :
sliversideup i love this it has a very intreseting rhythem :)
On March 13th 2008 UnSane420 Said :
UnSane420 this is awesome i love it
On March 5th 2008 seekerovtruth Said :
seekerovtruth You did a wonderful job with this. Rhyming every line can be difficult while still trying to maintain cohesiveness to the theme. You pulled it off quite nicely. Nice work!
On March 5th 2008 mydragonlord Said :
mydragonlord Cleverly done, the rhyming and all. Good job!!
On March 5th 2008 muse4apoem Said :
muse4apoem Good work! :)