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GUYS!!!!!!!

Views (128) Pain Created on 6-12-07 Flag

my eyes are red from lack of sleep

and also rimmed from crying

even tho my friends stand with me

inside i'm slowly dying.

 

the same sleepy eyes

angry dead and lying

all down my face

it's still tears i'm crying.

 

i wish that we were perfect

but we were one really big mistake

we laughed and played cheerful

but we knew it was fake.

 

do you see the little peices

all of me lies broken on the floor

one hit didn't hurt enough

i had to ask for more.

 

i use to beat myself up

and tear myself down

every. single. minute.

that he wasn't around.

 

I let myself get caught up

in relations with a guy

against the way i'm brought up

i still fell for the lie.

 

he said there was more to him

so much more to gain

but now i can't stop crying

he isn't worth this pain.

 

i don't think i've said this before

and i won't say it again

when it comes to guys no more

i guess that's the end.

 

                     *** i have a problem with beleiving the best in people. I was brought up to always tell the truth, and i forgot that not everyone was taught the same morals.even when there's indisputable proof that someone lies to me, i still beleive every word they say. stupid, right? 

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On July 2nd 2007 Aaquaian Said :
Aaquaian It really isn't stupid. This is a great poem you have here, and I'm sorry for the experience that brought it 'round.
On June 29th 2007 nikkineuha15 Said :
nikkineuha15 Wow, Sorry I didn't comment sooner, but I absolutly love the poem. Seriously it is great. You had a few words spelled wrong, but it was really good, I don't think there is much to change about it!! Super job!!! And it's not stupid that your like that. Actually, I am the same way!!! ~Nikki~
On June 22nd 2007 xxxAngelicaxxx Said :
xxxAngelicaxxx wow this is really good. i love it!
On June 15th 2007 Qurmudjin Said :
Qurmudjin Excellent. Great word choices, and I love the way you did the line "every. single. minute."
The iambic rhythm is a bit off in places, but the overall poem is strong.
On June 14th 2007 Darkrisky Said :
Darkrisky i can totally relate and it's an awesome poem
On June 12th 2007 manda36274 Said :
manda36274 no that is not stupid that you are that way. it just mean that you have a great heart, even if it is somebody does you wrong