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i had a bad week....couple of weeks....Rate this Poem
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Created on 12-20-07
insanity
gripping
reality
slipping
my mind; tuning in and out
voices
calling
baby
balling
my parents; hear them shout?
phone
ringing
doorbell
singing
my life; up in the air
supper
burning
stomach
turning
my family; they don't care
grades
sliding
teachers
chiding
my friends; worried about me
razor
gleaming
tears
streaming
my arms; bleeding, see?
actors
jeering
brothers
cheering
my patience; running low
peers
bold
world
cold
my death; the final blow
Please Login to post comments| On January 6th 2008 nikkineuha15 Said : | |
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Hey! This is a good poem!! :D don't put yourself down. You great!! :) ~Nikki~ |
| On January 1st 2008 jessnumber3 Said : | |
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i love it and i think your one of my favorite writers......EVER! haha |
| On December 27th 2007 angelalone Said : | |
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phone ringing doorbell singing....it was just that i was having a lot of trouble right then and my house was crazy chaotic.i realize i wasn't very clear about that:-) see why my poems suck so bad. |
| On December 26th 2007 J3w3llC82890 Said : | |
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i like the emotion in tis. its really good. i'm sorry you've been haveing a hardime though. but no matter how bad things get, theres always somthing [[someone]] to make it better.
*J* |
| On December 24th 2007 flacosmyname Said : | |
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well for constructive criticism, the poem was good because it was based on how you felt or feel,but some parts i could'nt visualoze like the "doorbell ringing" line, everything else was a perfect visualization though. and even if that line didnt make sense to me im probably wrong bcus these were probably the things that were happening around you at the moment, but good poem! |
| On December 23rd 2007 xxxAngelicaxxx Said : | |
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i dont think this sux at all. in fact i find it to be really good. i like the style of this one, its different |
| On December 21st 2007 fallenbloodxxx Said : | |
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i really like that different way you...created. it...=] |
