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Gluttony
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Created on 10-7-07
Glutton
Oh, Glutton
How despaired you are!
Ugly is ugly,
you've succeeded by far!
With the face of a dog,
and the ears of a bat,
the body of a pig,
the legs of a bird.
Glutton,
Oh, Glutton
How dismayed you are!
Tell me my child,
are you one of them?
With the beauty of a phoenix,
and the grace of a dove,
all this on the inside,
but a Glutton on the out!
Please Login to post comments| On December 19th 2007 Carcer Said : | |
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its good although id change the last 2 lines of each verse. like the last one, i think it would sound better if it said "and the grace of a dove, all this below but a glutton above". the slight rhyme will make the poem flow better. the first one could end with "the ears of a bat, your eating so much, you're becoming quite fat" but it doesnt sound as serious =/ |
