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We counted days, fingers on our hands

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Oh Brother

Views (85) Pain Created on 6-4-08 Flag

Remember? when we sat and planned
we counted days, fingers on our hands
no bond shared was ever stronger
no foul noisome prison ever longer
it was just me and you, you and me
for anything else, there was no need
days ticked by, weeks and then years
there was no voice for that of our fears
one day dawned, bright and clear
it was no different, I had you near
yet there were changes unseen
the stuff of my truest dream
suddenly doors were flung wide
there was no reason alive to hide
from the glimmering ocean of hope
the garish glittering string of rope
if I had known stepping into that light
that you would disappear from sight
I would step back and call you forward
victory without you is more than I can afford
a bitter fruit that dulls the senses
everything around me tenses
preparing for life without my rock
to be flung into the tide, and loose memory of the dock.

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On June 19th 2008 kissofasia Said :
kissofasia i love it,u did a great job.
On June 8th 2008 shorteternity Said :
shorteternity love the format.
On June 7th 2008 smile4evr Said :
smile4evr this is so great...great word use...love it!!
On June 6th 2008 kjoy428 Said :
kjoy428 wow thats amazing! it flows so well!
On June 6th 2008 moosegurl01 Said :
moosegurl01 It does flow well, I like it.=]
On June 6th 2008 chayeah22 Said :
chayeah22 I love it! Especically the the way the rhyme flows.
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On June 5th 2008 JWalker2406 Said :
JWalker2406 Another great poem! Just love the very last line! Awesome writing!!