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Originally written in January '07

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Ode To A Father

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     The Following was written from the perspective of my dear friend who lost her father back in the beginning of the year. This is kind of a freestyle poem I like to say because it doesnt really have a flow and in parts it doesnt rhyme in the coventional sense. I just wrote it as it came to me. My main objective was to simply convey emotion in it....I dont normally do poems but was inpired when she informed me of his passing. so please read objectively.

 

 

It's funny you know,

the methods time uses to pass by.

amidst amusement, a superluminal flow.

But exponentially slowing the last tics of a 9 to 5.

allowing the darkest of beings virtual immortality,

yet the brightest of souls exist with a maddening brevity.

Time's perplexing duality, is it even worth attempting to comprehend?

both biased and just, gentle and callous, a myriad of confusion thriving with no apparent end.

Is there something reprehensible with letting the good live long?

Is it unfair to ask for just enough time for one to finish life's song?

why this man? He was good to the core.

Instilled in me all that is good that is for sure.

would read me bedtime stories of various folklore.

If way out of line would leave my tail sore.

he would hold me close and say how much he loved me.

knew how to ease my mind when I felt like nothing.

A man who understood my quircks and idysyncracies

when others assumed I was consumed with lunacy.

Listened to my dreams and aspirations, never calling me foolish.

and through my times desperation, would say, i'll help you through this.

A soul so strong who touched many lifeforces other than my own,

his passing has caused ripples the levels of which I may truly never know.

What I do know is that I miss my father.

Mi Papi.

mijn vader.

mio padre.

mon père.

I want no need him here. this isnt fair.

I need to hear him say my darling, my dear.

who will wipe my tears, cheer my cheers,

make things clear, ease my fears.

He took with him a sizable portion of me. but in hindsight I suppose it is fair because he cleverly left a sizable portion of himself within me.

I know the days henceforth will be hard.

However I do know he is here in my heart.

Knowing this helps to ease my sorrow.

And I know that throughout his eternal slumber he will also be guiding me through all of my tomorrows.
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On August 15th 2008 SasobiUchiha Said :
SasobiUchiha ...You made me cry. Literally, I'm serious. You did a really great job.
On July 14th 2008 mydragonlord Said :
mydragonlord You have me in tears Doug! this is so beautifully written!
On July 13th 2008 Andy2Anomaly Said :
Andy2Anomaly I love that you can write for someone else and still have it turn out to be amazing.
On July 8th 2008 Calypso32 Said :
Calypso32 For channeling someone's pain, you really nailed it, I'm glad I read this.~L
On June 3rd 2008 sixtiesdoll Said :
sixtiesdoll This is really sweet of you to write for someone else. It's sad and beautifully written.
On May 11th 2008 deadpoet Said :
deadpoet the words, the emotion, the words, the emotion, ahhh-mazing.
On January 6th 2008 jetkills Said :
jetkills wow owesome ^-^
On December 11th 2007 TheDragonwitch Said :
TheDragonwitch This is so great and so nicely explains the celtic belief that you bring your universe with you with everyones contributions to it and you leave a part of yours with them, whether you are gone for a day or whatever sharing of worlds is timeless and eternal, so nice and really emotional.
On December 5th 2007 bronbron23 Said :
bronbron23 Good stuff Doug...From the heart, the best kind of poetry man.
On November 28th 2007 gonzo4201 Said :
gonzo4201 I really enjoyed this, even though you said the rhyme scheme and the flow weren't conventional, what is conventional? as long as the emotion is there, it shouldn't matter if it rhymes or whatnot but nonetheless I thought it was a very touching poem, and I liked it very much
On November 20th 2007 sexy77586 Said :
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Wow, doug I thought my words were hard on me, since you no I lost MY dad, recomending this was the best thing u could have done. Thank u doug, Russia.
On November 18th 2007 ausjo Said :
ausjo I really liked it. Losing my father is one of my biggest fears and it totally spoke to me. Lovely.
On November 11th 2007 lisaljb Said :
lisaljb Deep and emotional, it's a great freestyle poem, no doubt about it. Great job!
On October 31st 2007 Bumpkingurl Said :
Bumpkingurl Well done. I like it.
On October 20th 2007 morbidangel585 Said :
morbidangel585 i loved this one. lots of emotion here
On June 9th 2007 krista32890 Said :
krista32890 I do see the emotion here. I really liked it. Even though is may not flow like a regular poem, like you said, I sense that it makes it better. More raw.
On June 9th 2007 krista32890 Said :
krista32890 I do see the emotion here. I really liked it. Even though is may not flow like a regular poem, like you said, I sense that it makes it better. More raw.