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Effect and Cause
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Created on 10-24-07
Note: This was an expirement for me. I have tons of ideas in my head. I knew what I wanted to write. However I could not decide on how to write it. (if that makes sense) I wanted to do a poem but I had the words already in my head mostly and did not want it to rhyme. I could have written a short story. But I didn't want that style either. I opted for a Haiku fo sorts. However I decided to fudge around and make it a maarathon Haiku so it's 5-7-5-7-5 and so forth. I dont do Haiku really so I hope it's ok. It's definately diffrent but I think that's a good thing. Well I simply ask you to read with an open mind. Be well.
Unbelievable!
You laying there, fate beckons
Machines beep....beep....beep
My presence, now felt by you
Your eyes open up
Pans left, pans right, you find me
You attempt to smile
Must be uncomfortable
With tubes and whatnot
Old bed pans, scores of bed sores
Iv's and saline
You're far too drugged to feel pain
Shhh. Don't try to talk
For I have plenty to say
My darling mother
I have loved you for so long
Your flesh always warm
Your heart forever frozen
Or blind to pure truth
Ignorance your bedfellow
I came to you mom
Upfront, real, raw, and honest
I came to you mom
You chose that bastard not me
Each time I came forth
While drunk he'd try and take me
Never Suceeded
He wanted me to taste him
Never Suceeded
For my troubles you slap me
That made me feel loved
Then you sat that I'm jealous
'Cause I love dick right?
Are you fucking kidding me?
What? no smile no more?
Then you'll get a kick from this
See as you lay there
Your body betraying you
You desire life
And I am your salvation
I am told we match
That you will need my kidney
If you are to thrive
Bequeath my healthy kidney?
Renew your life's lease?
Wearing blinders you damned mine
He never took me
He tried but I yielded not
He could not have me
Instead he chose to beat me
You saw my bruises
You heard me struggle with him
bruised flesh, broken ribs
For his troubles you'd fuck him.
So where is this man?
Hmmmm. He's not at your bedside?
I suppose that's best
Because I'd fuckin' kill him
He loved to beat boys
But I have grown the fuck up
You made a poor choice
Ignoring your progeny
This was the cause mom
The effect set in motion
By your callousness
You recieve not my kidney
So die like I did
You killed me 12 years ago
Toc-tic, your time's up
Please Login to post comments| On August 16th 2008 lexiigurl345 Said : | |
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you literaly ripped the oxygen dead cold outof my body. |
| On August 5th 2008 lushess007 Said : | |
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That was very deep & breath taking at the same time! It is very well written! |
| On July 15th 2008 1FallenAngel7 Said : | |
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wow ur poems are amazing... |
| On July 13th 2008 Andy2Anomaly Said : | |
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I can feel the power of this piece. Truly amazing. |
| On July 1st 2008 Liz912 Said : | |
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Your words are often very strong, much stronger than the words spoken by I but that's not so unbelievable considering your like double my age :P |
| On January 7th 2008 KaosQueen Said : | |
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oh very nice! and deep i love it :] |
| On January 6th 2008 jetkills Said : | |
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so strong i love it ^-^ |
| On December 8th 2007 Hollehmariee Said : | |
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I actually really do like this, well done :] xx |
| On December 4th 2007 donkaii Said : | |
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wow very powerful =D |
| On November 27th 2007 AMC500 Said : | |
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Amazing poem bro, it beautiful. That being said alot of people tend to think that a dramatic yet sad poem like that cant be beautiful but to me the pain brings beauty |
| On November 18th 2007 ausjo Said : | |
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Wow. I really hope this isn't based on something you had to endure. Very moving. |
| On November 11th 2007 lisaljb Said : | |
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holy shit, this was really impressive. Enough said. (You know what I'm thinking.) |
| On November 1st 2007 13Peace Said : | |
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Strong, deep and beautiful! Thanks for sharing! |
| On October 31st 2007 EvilRaven9892 Said : | |
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Wow that is strong and just wow. it left me speachless |
| On October 31st 2007 Bumpkingurl Said : | |
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It flows quite well, good job. I also agree with morbidangel. |
| On October 30th 2007 dsouthernlily Said : | |
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I liked it. stong words!!! |
| On October 24th 2007 transgenic Said : | |
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I agree w/ morbidangel |
| On October 24th 2007 morbidangel585 Said : | |
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wow that is really strong. but its said perfectly. this turned out well |
