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Alone |
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Confusion |
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Dreams |
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Sorrow |
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The River |
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Sailing |
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Endless Path |
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Sin |
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To wait |
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Questioning |
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Be Careful |
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Running blind |
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Division |
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Darkness and Cold |
Division
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Created on 9-9-07
The troops,
are divided.
My mind,
so too.
Stuck in eternal indecision,
Nowhere to go.
Troops spread far,
Confusion.
They dropped from nowhere,
black dots in the sky.
Great balls of destruction,
in my minds eye.
These thoughts of mine,
wreaking havoc.
The bombs strike,
the middle of the line.
Bodies dying,
but souls too.
Where is my soul,
and what is it going to do?
Please Login to post comments| On September 22nd 2007 alienz13 Said : | |
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really neato |
| On September 12th 2007 Savedbyalamb Said : | |
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I like it a lot! |
| On September 11th 2007 Blueismybaby Said : | |
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it's very interesting....i like it!!! |
| On September 10th 2007 stubishead Said : | |
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that is amazing! it really takes you in deep. and the way in which you presented it is awesome. |
| On September 9th 2007 mcihellejane Said : | |
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I really like this one. You did a great job building up throughout the poem. I love the way that each part is kind of it's own little thought. Definetly a good piece! |
| On September 9th 2007 darkangel726 Said : | |
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its really good! i liked the pattern thingy u did. |
| On September 9th 2007 Smarties4 Said : | |
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Not something I would usually write, but hope you like it
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