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Falling Up
As you lose touch, I lose control,
the last connection, dying affection,
falling in a upward direction,
complexion pale as snow, moving slow,
where ever we end up, where ever we go,
Our attraction will decease to know,
No real cure for my thoughts, cant be taken and cant be bought,
Using methods well proven and self taught,
caught in an upright decline,
My words are simple my thoughts a vine,
climb to the bottom,
Drop to the Top,
In this upside down world nothing really matters,
dreams shatter,
Love is twisted in directions that were never ment,
respect for oneself is all you really need to survive
Sitting alone in a deep northern rain forest early in the summer
| On June 24th 2008 RalRasper Said : | |
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I Just GOt THAt Feeling Back |
| On June 24th 2008 charon17 Said : | |
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Oh my goodness it was good and so different you make me feel like I don't have any talent in the poetry area. |
| On April 13th 2008 fadedembers123 Said : | |
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not bad now i can give you a little respect :p |
| On March 5th 2008 numbbbb0z Said : | |
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Dig this, man. Real good. Wasn't expectin' these words from ya :) How long'd it take ya to write this? Flowin' with originality, man, diggin' the rhyme scheme. Intelligent yet sensitive yet non-cliche and poetic. |
| On March 4th 2008 beautyisthewol Said : | |
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this is good. |
| On March 4th 2008 transgenic Said : | |
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Awesome choice of words. Great work, I love it. |
| On March 4th 2008 msszelly Said : | |
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VERY COOL!!! |
| On March 4th 2008 monkeydee22 Said : | |
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very good. I love this it puts imagery into the words. Keep me posted for more!
~Vampyr~ |
| On March 4th 2008 teeniegirl015 Said : | |
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i like this a lot. It's different and sincere. The first three lines caught my attention. |
| On March 4th 2008 madmarcus Said : | |
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yeah the first line is an eye catcher! I think the title is perfect. I had the impression of a cascading affect but you were bringing everything up....so yeah. I dig the madness. |
| On March 4th 2008 gonzo4201 Said : | |
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Very different, Very good |
| On March 4th 2008 goodgurl8504 Said : | |
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Very interesting... |
| On March 4th 2008 mydragonlord Said : | |
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I love the first line it really grabs you! Diffirant and Good you have to think as you read this one. |


