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Beside Me |
You Ignored Me
You Ignored Me
Cold, cold water surrounds me now
And I’m reaching out for your hand
Can you see me? Can you hear me?
Do you choose to ignore the dreams I’d planned?
I’m drifting further away from you
Trying to shout out your name
You always said you’d be there for me
To take away this pain
I need you more now than ever before
But still you walk away
As the water keeps on rising
My mind’s in disarray
I lift my hand to hail you
Only now I’m slipping under
I’m sinking into the darkness
My thoughts begin to wander
I asked for your help not once, but thrice
Yet you never came to my aid
All I wanted was your advice
Now my faith has been betrayed
I’ve never claimed to be a religious man
But I still believed in You
I won’t be asking for your help again
My praying days are through
| On June 19th 2008 speederspider Said : | |
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God it's amazing. Perhaps the person had to walk away to work out some inner conflicts that they were having. Maybe they needed alone time...I absolutely love your writing. It's so straight forward and set personal at the same time. |
| On May 30th 2008 LandRforever Said : | |
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this is amazing.. I love it. I can feel the emotions.. keep writing.. I want more.. :) |
| On May 30th 2008 kissofasia Said : | |
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i can feel the emotions of it.love it |
| On May 30th 2008 mcihellejane Said : | |
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I absolutely love this one...You wrote it very well. Again, your frustration, sadness etc. makes me kinda sad, but the poem was great! My favorite part is the first stanza-a great introduction to the rest of the poem. "Cold, cold water surrounds me now" and "do you choose to ignore the dreams I've planned" Very wonderful lines-loved them :) Keep sharing your feelings-I love reading your poems!! |
| On May 29th 2008 deadpoet Said : | |
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why didnt i read this earlier today? no lie, in all honesty, this poem was amazing |
| On May 28th 2008 sixtiesdoll Said : | |
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This is amazing. I love the flow. Happy you found some writing insporation again1 :) Keep writing. |


