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Created:
11/25 2006
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419
Category:
Fear
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The Side Without Light
Blood has been shed.....
Thousands are dead......
The Blood Skies show that people have died.....
Bodies to the left and to the right.....
Your soul fills with black cold fright......
As the winds clear the sky.......
Millons of people bound to die......
When the wemon and children are left......
You know the men have seen only death......
Can you trust the people?
The Ones You Love And HATE
THE ONES YOU CANT RELATE..................
The Red Sky Shows That People Have Died
Drink The RedRum Then Look Simply when the word is backwords
REDRUM
MURDER
do not cry do not fret as we grow closer to death...........
Please Login to post comments| On October 18th 2007 krislynn08 Said: |
| wow ur truly an amazing poet |
| On August 30th 2007 Peanutjr8 Said: |
| oops, lol |
| On August 30th 2007 Peanutjr8 Said: |
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| WOW, that was a realy great poem, i love your choice of words for it, keep up the great work. |
| On August 30th 2007 Peanutjr8 Said: |
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| WOW, that was a realy great poem, i love your choice of words for it, keep up the great work. |
| On August 30th 2007 Peanutjr8 Said: |
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| WOW, that was a realy great poem, i love your choice of words for it, keep up the great work. |
| On July 14th 2007 Javellef Said: |
| Hauntingly real, your words capture the sadness of war and death. |
| On July 8th 2007 Sissy0604 Said: |
| Wow... Amazing.. ur really good!! |
| On July 8th 2007 CassieZ Said: |
| nice |
| On June 29th 2007 fgggfx Said: |
| great choice of words, and it has good rhythem, i like it |
| On June 22nd 2007 NicoleSmith159 Said: |
| This was really great |
| On March 10th 2007 diet7up Said: |
| LEAVE IT THE WAY IT IS I LIKE IT |
| On January 13th 2007 joshattack Said: |
| nice. i have a couple suggestions which make the meter flow more smoothly, at least in the way im reciting it. In line 4 id say "bodies to the left, others to the right" In line 5 Id say "...with the black cold of fright"
and the last line might work a little better as "...as we grow on getting closer to death." ut, I'll stress the point that these are simply some suggestions. If the way it's written works for you, keep it that way. I think it'd make an awesome song, so I hope the band thing works out for you. |
| On December 31st 2006 SkeletalGain Said: |
| Not bad! |
| On December 30th 2006 Slyclever Said: |
| I love this one the best so far... |
| On December 27th 2006 hollielewlove Said: |
| thats really good! thumbs up! |
| On December 24th 2006 clay6618 Said: |
| I like the rhyme scheme. |
| On December 22nd 2006 leeshaforeverr Said: |
| my sentimence exactly...wow... |
| On November 26th 2006 froglover18 Said: |
| wow... |
| On November 25th 2006 micmac613 Said: |
| very real... and i like redrum, murder part- it adds a little tag on the end. |
| On November 25th 2006 genny15 Said: |
| thats a good one too<3 |
