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Views (111) Pain Created on 10-18-07 Flag

Some things should never be done.
Here is a simple story of one.
There used to be a girl in my life,
and it was my desire to take her to be my wife.
We used to talk and talk,
and together hand in hand, we would walk.
and I loved her very much,
and life was good and such.
Then one day, it all fell apart,
and when she left, so did my heart.
Since then it's all gone south,
and I sit here with a gun in my mouth.
now as the blood flows in a stream,
each wasted drop another broken dream,
I lay back on the stretcher, closing my eyes,
I begin to see through the lies.
Tears leak, as I enter the institute,
For I have been naught but a substitute.

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On August 29th 2008 hawkstar Said :
hawkstar Beautiful poem!
On February 21st 2008 HumanF17TH Said :
HumanF17TH this is really good....for some reasons the lines "now as the blood flows in a stream, each wasted drop another broken dream," really stand out to me haha...good poem!
On December 20th 2007 KLKlove Said :
KLKlove This poem seems like the basics... like something every other poet would write. You captured the main point but where is the cleverness of the poem. Its supposed to make the reader jump into the poem. I look at what other people have posted before reading the poem and based off of that I decide whether I like it or not, but I didn't do that for yours. I read this and it was same old same old. Put more power into it. make it flow without the painful cliches
On December 20th 2007 ladyrosalyn007 Said :
ladyrosalyn007 wow
On October 19th 2007 Xpoetxgurlx Said :
Xpoetxgurlx this is....wow...its amazing...i..wow im speechless for many different reasons lol. but i mean.. wow...this is really really good! =]