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Created on 8-12-07
I'm going insane,
It's impossible to ignore the pain,
I don't know what to do anymore,
My heart's torn and sore
So I'm stuck here thinking of you,
Wonding what I can do
At you, I just want to stare,
This pain, I just cannot bare,
It makes me want to curl up and die,
Tears falling down as I forever cry,
So how can I make this pain go away?
When it seem so determined to stay
Please Login to post comments| On August 20th 2007 HRHHermione Said : | |
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I certainly don't want to seem harsh, but it feels like this one is really straining to rhyme. You sacrifice rhythm for rhyme, and that really makes it somewhat choppy. |
