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Hell of a Broken Heart |
Hell of a Broken Heart
I've never visited this specific hell before-
Inside of my conflicted, self inflicted war.
Remembering all those times you lied,
Nights I've cried, and my missing pride.
Reliving the recurring hurt and pain.
Being trampled by this screeching train.
The train of false, reckless accusations.
My heart seeks merciless retribution
For the hazardous remains left scattered-
Of my heart now harmfully shattered.
The anguish caused by your neglect
Is begging for revenge in retrospect.
Wishing for you to feel this agony too,
To have karma thrust this into your view.
Having happiness only in a web of lies,
The sacrifices and independent vies,
Blindly trusting the obvious deceptions,
Loving what are only misconceptions.
Unexpectedly discovering reality's jest
Played on the core of life in your chest.
I crave you to learn what I know all too well.
Until we share, though, I'm alone in this hell.
| On August 14th 2008 chickenbroth Said : | |
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Your first two lines were captivating and amazing. Well done. |
| On June 24th 2008 Kidojidoari Said : | |
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I love this poem's well-arranged word flow... It was so biting and lovely~ I fell in love with it.
Your words are so beautifully toxic. :] |
| On June 24th 2008 MaraLicious177 Said : | |
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i really enjoyed this. the word choice is extraordinary. very very well done |
| On June 24th 2008 xHickChick789x Said : | |
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wow yeah I can really relate to this one. Having a broken heart surely makes you feel like you're in hell, I know. Anyhow, I love it though. Great job! |
| On June 24th 2008 CharTheKnight Said : | |
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I love all of the contents of poetry you used...like assonance and rhyme scheme. This is a great poem keep up the great work. :D |
| On June 24th 2008 TheLionRoar Said : | |
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Very well written I really enjoyed this. It flowed really well for an AA-BB... poem. |
| On June 24th 2008 gonzo4201 Said : | |
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Though to have one's heart broken, One must first possess such organ, I have definitely felt this feeling before, Very Good!! |
| On June 24th 2008 deadpoet Said : | |
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"Having happiness only in a web of lies,
The sacrifices and independent vies,
Blindly trusting the obvious deceptions,
Loving what are only misconceptions." - wooh, this poem flowed very well...if only I could think of more to say! critism of some kind...but Im not too well at that considering I see something good in everything...and this poem was very good |
| On June 24th 2008 101091 Said : | |
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Wow. Excellent work. I really enjoyed reading this, and it's all to true that a broken heart is like hell. |


