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Forever We'll Be
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Created on 7-12-07
Our rain falls away,
Into the sea,
Forever we'll be,
Together you and me.
The thunder it sounds,
All through the land,
Forever we'll be,
Together; silently.
The clouds seem to stay,
All in the sky,
Forever we'll be,
Together; lovingly.
Right here where we lie,
Next to the bay,
Forever we'll be,
Together; permanently.
Into the sea,
Forever we'll be,
Together you and me.
The thunder it sounds,
All through the land,
Forever we'll be,
Together; silently.
The clouds seem to stay,
All in the sky,
Forever we'll be,
Together; lovingly.
Right here where we lie,
Next to the bay,
Forever we'll be,
Together; permanently.
Please Login to post comments| On July 15th 2007 Xpoetxgurlx Said : | |
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very very cute! i love it! ^.^ |
| On July 15th 2007 pinkchickemma Said : | |
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great poem good repetition =] |
| On July 14th 2007 fgggfx Said : | |
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very cute |
| On July 14th 2007 sexigrl10 Said : | |
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i love the repition |
| On July 14th 2007 Erick67 Said : | |
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This is awesome. |
| On July 14th 2007 undiie Said : | |
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I love it! =] |
| On July 13th 2007 crazkoala Said : | |
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great flow, and the repeating lines are beautiful. amazing alltogether =) |
| On July 12th 2007 Tigga16 Said : | |
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I love this!!! |
| On July 12th 2007 jarnotti Said : | |
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wow i love this nice job |
| On July 12th 2007 lilcutiepie13 Said : | |
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nice job i love poems u should write more and i give u lots of cred |
| On July 12th 2007 sadee309 Said : | |
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amazing work! good job! |
| On July 12th 2007 California1516 Said : | |
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i love the flow to it..great job on that!..and i like how smooth it is when u read it..if that made sense..lol..this is prolly one of my fav poems of urs so far..keep up the great work |
| On July 12th 2007 spikies7 Said : | |
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I loved the way you set the poem up!! Really good!!! |
| On July 12th 2007 101091 Said : | |
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I love the repetition. Great job. |
| On July 12th 2007 fallenxxseeker Said : | |
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anyone see anything funny about the last 2 comments? lol!!1...seriously, jeff, this is really good...imagery is amazing...keep it up! |
| On July 12th 2007 lovveMe1127 Said : | |
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wow i loved it that was amazing i love the repition as well. |
| On July 12th 2007 lovveMe1127 Said : | |
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wow i loved it that was amazing i love the repition as well. |
| On July 12th 2007 stics917 Said : | |
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the repitition is a cool effect,you get my vote |
| On July 12th 2007 poet77 Said : | |
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I love the repition, it works well, I just want to know more about the thunder and the clouds, get a better visual you know? and is this about death? I'm still debating that. otherwise than that, no criticism. i'm gonna vote for it. |
| On July 12th 2007 cjaskot Said : | |
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I love the last line of every verse =) soo very great. I didn't see anything i didnt understand or didnt like, so i give it my vote =) |
