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Ugh, I dont even know how I wrote this.

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The Belt.

Views (402) Pain Created on 7-9-07 Flag
This pain it hurts, I fall to the ground,
This pain it hurts, I hear the sound,
Of a cracking belt upon my back,
You cock your arm and then attack,

This pain it hurts, I feel it lots,
This pain it hurts, "Do what your taught",
You tell me as you pull away,
As I fall to the ground in pain today..
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On July 29th 2008 SimpleInsanity Said :
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t was a nice poem but the word cock made me laugh. Also i think whip would be a beeter word than belt.
On July 11th 2007 sexypunkchick Said :
sexypunkchick I like it...its very good...but sad though
On July 9th 2007 ThisIsTheDay Said :
ThisIsTheDay i like this...*high five* haha. -Lozer™ [commends you on a job well done.]
On July 9th 2007 raheelio432 Said :
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'tis a pretty good poem.
On July 9th 2007 lexlovesrich Said :
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wow, thats insanely good. so sad though :[
On July 9th 2007 ALICHELLA16 Said :
ALICHELLA16 i think ur trying to rhyme to much
On July 9th 2007 jarnotti Said :
jarnotti very good sad though but really good
On July 9th 2007 aviateress Said :
aviateress very well done! i could tell what was going on from the begining of it, great job!
On July 9th 2007 MomWhoCares Said :
MomWhoCares Boy, if I didn't know for a fact this is fictional I would be trying to track you down to get you out of your environment! You're a great kid Jeff, as well as an amazing writer.
On July 9th 2007 Savedbyalamb Said :
Savedbyalamb This poem is rly good...I like it.
On July 9th 2007 fallenxxseeker Said :
fallenxxseeker Tragic, to be sure...but its effective...a few rhymes seemed forced at first, but then i reread and realized that that adds to the overall tone...as usual, im impressed
On July 9th 2007 milolover36 Said :
milolover36 Loved it!!! very deep but it keeps me thinking and that's good! lol
On July 9th 2007 cjaskot Said :
cjaskot ok well you said to give you either bad or good feed back, and i dont have any bad feedback which means this is a great poem, you can kinda see whats going on in your mind as you read this poem, great work =)
On July 9th 2007 Tigga16 Said :
Tigga16 I agree with mcihellejane It does bring the image to life. Sad but well written too. ^_^ I love your work
On July 9th 2007 lrcldncr Said :
lrcldncr this a really good poem. it expresses clearly what it is like.
On July 9th 2007 mcihellejane Said :
mcihellejane This one is so physical-you brought the image to life. Very sad poem, but well written~
On July 9th 2007 Pooh455 Said :
Pooh455 aweeee good but sad :[ check mine
On July 9th 2007 101091 Said :
101091 Wow... I don't even know what to say. That's very very deep and emotional and well written. Extremely sad but well written.
On July 9th 2007 California1516 Said :
California1516 omg wow..this is a sadening poem..its very good tho