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Escaping Lost Choices
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Created on 10-29-07
The expectations, pressure,
They stack, they all build up,
All compressed it smashes down,
All exits seem to shut.
You hope to be escaping,
And pray to get away,
All freedom is now taken,
Your wings are gone today.
Now trying pushing harder,
You're straining muscles now,
Can't remove it by yourself,
You choose to disavow.
Now trapped inside the choices,
That you were forced to take,
Needed friends to pull you out,
And cover your mistake.
Its not yet late to ask for help,
Though now it may be hard,
They want to help you out of this,
They give their best regards.
They stack, they all build up,
All compressed it smashes down,
All exits seem to shut.
You hope to be escaping,
And pray to get away,
All freedom is now taken,
Your wings are gone today.
Now trying pushing harder,
You're straining muscles now,
Can't remove it by yourself,
You choose to disavow.
Now trapped inside the choices,
That you were forced to take,
Needed friends to pull you out,
And cover your mistake.
Its not yet late to ask for help,
Though now it may be hard,
They want to help you out of this,
They give their best regards.
Please Login to post comments| On November 17th 2007 comacozi101 Said : | |
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i love it... whether the "to" is in it or not... :D |
| On October 29th 2007 ThisIsTheDay Said : | |
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I like this...no crits, really...good job. ^_^ |
| On October 29th 2007 Jeff1315 Said : | |
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i agree, it does sound better with that extra "to" in it :)
thnx 101091
lol, LRN2NGLSH? Learn to type. :) |
| On October 29th 2007 Carolgreen Said : | |
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Yeah, u lil Aron character needa go do smthin ta urself |
| On October 29th 2007 undiie Said : | |
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Hm. That was a lame comment below... Good poem though. I say you spam the user who made that comment. =P |
| On October 29th 2007 AnonAreLegion Said : | |
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er, choices aren't choices if your forced to make them, faggot. Furthermore, you dont "take" choices, you "make" them. LRN2NGLSH |
| On October 29th 2007 Xpoetxgurlx Said : | |
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this is a to mazing!! i love this one ALLOOTTTTTT =D
it flows amazingly and the rhymes r awesome =D
YAY FOR JEFF! =P |
| On October 29th 2007 101091 Said : | |
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Wow. I love it. It flows pretty well, up until "Its not yet late to ask for help," it's up to you but I think I would have changed it to it's not yet to late to ask for help. Either way, it's really good. I love it. |
