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An atrophic mind....Jan. 25.08Rate this Poem
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Created:
02/10 2008
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Atrophy
Your atrophic mind..
Once was open, is now blind
You're wasting your talent, degrading it by the hour
You're throwing away all of your special power
Quickly becoming mentally useless
And you will see no sympathy, the world is ruthless
Hear my words, try to comprehend
With out these skills, with out that knowledge
Your life, you will not be able to properly defend
It's pathetic, but true
The worst could happen to you
And you might not be able to protect yourself
You'll be unable to prove what you once had
Trying in life, will prevent you from suffering a life so sad
Once was open, is now blind
You're wasting your talent, degrading it by the hour
You're throwing away all of your special power
Quickly becoming mentally useless
And you will see no sympathy, the world is ruthless
Hear my words, try to comprehend
With out these skills, with out that knowledge
Your life, you will not be able to properly defend
It's pathetic, but true
The worst could happen to you
And you might not be able to protect yourself
You'll be unable to prove what you once had
Trying in life, will prevent you from suffering a life so sad
| On March 7th 2008 ALIESAM21 Said: |
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| Wow! love it! |
| On February 18th 2008 oz10norrid Said: |
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| i like the rhyme skeme it holds it together and makes it flow |
| On February 18th 2008 lisaljb Said: |
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| wow, I'm rather impressed, vwell done! |
| On February 17th 2008 xxxAngelicaxxx Said: |
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| A MAZ ING! i loved it. id def have to say this is one of my favorites |
| On February 13th 2008 numba1chic Said: |
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| love it, especially the ending, very powerful poem |
| On February 12th 2008 joabizz Said: |
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| again, I love your work, you really have a way with your words.. greatness... |
| On February 12th 2008 fleainfested77 Said: |
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| hahah i remember you were in my room and reading this one to your mom , "mom?! are you listening"
your mom-"huh uhh oh, yeah, i like it " hahah
but yeah, ood poem , nice title
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| On February 11th 2008 charissa14 Said: |
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| wow ... simply amazing |
| On February 11th 2008 coltaw Said: |
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| Good work. Such a looming warning the narrator is giving to the other. You can feel a sense of desperation in these words. |
| On February 10th 2008 pinkheffalump Said: |
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| atrophy...nice choice of words here!! |
| On February 10th 2008 jeff2625 Said: |
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| Wow! court, great poem..I love the ending...I will have to keep that in mind..love ya, xxxoo |
| On February 10th 2008 eldestgoddess Said: |
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| Holy shamolagins!~this a very impowering poem. Keep them coming. |
| On February 10th 2008 seekerovtruth Said: |
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| WOW! POWERFUL! DEAD ON BULLS EYE! RIGHT!!!! |


