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Created on 3-5-07
And when did we loose we
The kind of love brought up in a family
You saved us from that harsh world of ours
Only to leave us more damaged and scarred
For all those times we needed you
You walked away
And every time we said I love you
You looked the other way
What is it that must be done?
To show you your pain has just begun
Never have you looked to me with open eyes
The only truth hid in your lies
Just seven years ago
I dried my tears and packed my bags
Just hoping that you would know
I did this just for you
After everything you’ve put me through
I left and did it on my own
It was hard not being fully grown.
But knowing your jealousy
And all the things you did in spite of me
I lost all reason to believe.
Lost all faith in this good ol’ family tree.
All the things I’ve been longing for
Never quit in reach
Because you not once,
Could practice what you preach.
So here we are now
Claiming everything is fine, you see
When the truth to our family is
It was never meant to be.
Please Login to post comments| On March 16th 2007 BlkWingDragon Said : | |
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I loved it, poems don't have to ryhme, and who cares if you spelled something wrong. Looking forward to reading more. |
| On March 13th 2007 thatbluewoman Said : | |
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after i finished this i was nodding my head and thinking, wow this is one heckuva poem. great job!! |
| On March 7th 2007 jenkywenky Said : | |
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really liked some of the thoughts this gave me. well done. |
| On March 6th 2007 Valentine872 Said : | |
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Unique. Nice job. |
| On March 6th 2007 eriqita Said : | |
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It Sounds like me when i was a teen moving on my own to care for myself after i raised my brothers. I love it!! |
| On March 5th 2007 isdrowning Said : | |
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this is an interesting poem. it's easy to see what's going on, and some of the rhymes are way cool. you have one spelling error, but it's cool, it's really common. |
| On March 5th 2007 francine2727 Said : | |
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i like it :) |
