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Eternal Youth

Views (322) Worry Created on 1-15-07 Flag

My heart beats for the blue eyed girl that cant find a place in this world she can't see her face is a pearl, precious unique and priceless, instead she looks in the mirror and wants to hurl because all that stares
back is ugliness that comes alive, I've gotta strive to replace all the lies with truth, there is no eternal youth and beauty does live inside the mind- see, you have no reason to run and hide. I've also gotta show that eight year old boy that there is a thing called love, gotta handle his heart with kid gloves. I don't know why his daddy plays so rough. I wish i knew why he has to see his mom get beat up while they're living in a dump, so young and off the bridge he wants to jump- he shudders when I give him a hug, he's gotta see that not every man is a wife-beating thug. They've all gotta see that they can't even trust me 'cuz only one man can mend a heart in pieces- I met
him in my toughest times. His name is Jesus and he's the only one that truly frees us. This is a lesson I learned long ago after being burned by people I know, now I live for Him and I reap what I sow.
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On January 16th 2007 passionistic Said :
passionistic First thing .. this was truely amazing .. but I think the feeling in it would come out more if you seperated it a little bit .. there is so much emotion in this it is unbelievable ... but with more spacing you would keep more readers intrigued .. and there are seperations in this where there shouldnt be :D but all in all I like it alot
On January 16th 2007 imagitu95 Said :
imagitu95 very nice
On January 15th 2007 BLuEEyEs1618 Said :
BLuEEyEs1618 Amazing! good work
On January 15th 2007 joshattack Said :
joshattack this really would b a great slam piece.
On January 15th 2007 londonchick50 Said :
londonchick50 Beautiful. I really love it. Great poem. Keep it up. (:
On January 15th 2007 lonestarwaltzi Said :
lonestarwaltzi i love this it wouldbe a great slam piece!