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Twisted Sister
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Created on 1-2-07
Inside a house, its paint peeling
like a dead man's skin
I thought I had never been here
but how'd i end up here again?
I can see the fear in her eyes
She pulls me harder, she tries and she cries...
Out, outside
the wind is churning, burning my eyes
there's a twister turning not far behind
it's coming for my twisted sister
something so sinister, all in my mind
all alone now, im gasping
like it's my last breath
I thought you were gone just then
but im back home again
just a dream but not just lies
she pulled me harder, she tried and she cried...
out, outside
the wind was churning, burning my eyes
there's a twister turning not far behind
it came for my twisted sister
something so sinister, all in my mind
you died to me last night
Please Login to post comments| On January 29th 2008 HumanF17TH Said : | |
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dam....deep i love it! |
| On December 18th 2007 ilovekylep Said : | |
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I loved it |
| On September 16th 2007 AmiottDe Said : | |
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That is so awesome!!! |
| On May 20th 2007 13579Vee Said : | |
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lik woe.thats cool hey im new here check out some of my poetry tell me what u think |
| On April 14th 2007 lonestarwaltzi Said : | |
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that was awesome!!!!! i love the rythmic way it moved, churned, just the way you wanted it too
riiiight on |
| On March 22nd 2007 angelbiotch33 Said : | |
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my fiance wants to use this as a song |
| On January 30th 2007 sunny102 Said : | |
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Another good one! |
| On January 26th 2007 ralicia Said : | |
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wow thats pretty dark and flows really well |
| On January 25th 2007 vixon4fun74 Said : | |
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I like this alot, hair band or not! |
| On January 10th 2007 nigerianboriqu Said : | |
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I like to start of by saying the beggining is really really strong. I think the contrast of simile and the concrete detail like the peeling paint pleases the senses a little as well as set the mood for the poem and offers such a tangible quality that is kind of lost int he end by the repitition of lines. But it is not a bad poem, I just sort of wish it ended as strongly as it started, but this is probably my favorite poem out of all the ones you have writtin so far and I have read them all. I like the way you play with words, and the diction you set. It's really pleasing to read your poems out loud because the syllables are fun to play with. |
| On January 10th 2007 500nets Said : | |
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i cannot say i care for the name because it was a hair band from the 80's(i think it was the 80's) |
| On January 9th 2007 m4phi4vlad Said : | |
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wow... deep |
| On January 5th 2007 RapeMeForLove Said : | |
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Deep. I loved it. |
