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THE ENCHANTED RIVER |
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The memories are REAL |
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Short and sweet |
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WHY IS MY POETRY LITTERED WITH DOOM |
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A VIOLENT ROMANCE |
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LOVE IN A BOTTLE |
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A PASSION FOR POPPIES |
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ANIMAL AFFAIR |
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The truth about JACK & JILL |
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I seem to dream my life away,
This statement is no lie.
I wish that I could just dream on,
After I should die.
Life is just too much for me,
So much I want to do.
I'm 31 with no career,
Still havn't got a clue.
I hardly sleep at all these days,
There's too much in my head.
If not for my strong will to live,
I'd probably be dead.
My brain cells move around so fast,
They generate much heat.
You could boil an egg in there,
Wouldn't that be neat.
I had some time to do weird things,
I hope you understand.
I bought a brand new video,
Too bad it's second hand.
Sometimes if I'm in the mood,
I'll exercise my bong.
Come up with a melody,
And write another song.
I don't care if people stare,
I like to smoke allot.
I've never ever heard a case,
Of tripping hard on pot.
I know I've scared some people off,
They just don't like my style.
In their quest for great success,
Forgotten how to smile.
I sit here half sedated,
Just for fun I spose.
I blame myself for everything,
It is the life I chose.
I never will get recognized,
On a secret hidden poster.
Just like the old saying,
Up shit creek without a toaster.
I know some verses don't make sense,
That was all inteneded.
If you find a deeper meaning,
That's just fucking splendid.
I think now I'll just fade away,
Continue in seclusion.
Portions of my brain are dead,
That is no delusion.
JoN. 27-Sep-2007
| On November 9th 2007 dsouthernlily Said : | |
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Wow very deep and honest. Great work |
| On October 30th 2007 chubb5 Said : | |
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the sweet simplicty of poetry that i have not acquired is very well demonstrated in this poem. boil an egg in your head. why didn' i tink of taht? |
| On October 13th 2007 PoeticPang Said : | |
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^__________^ great structure.. i really didn't notice anything not making sense.. ?.... it's very well flowed in and out of,, everythings placed perfectly.... each line has depth,, very well done,,, there isn't really nothing wrong with u at all, btw.. sometimes Life takes time... ur only 2/4 into ur Life.. (well that is if u have forths,, hmmm,, depends)........ very good,,, enjoyable.. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~Pang |
| On October 12th 2007 mazerthumpkin Said : | |
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hahaha! I laughed. Some people just don't appreciate things for what they are... |
| On September 28th 2007 pru1989 Said : | |
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wow i love brutal honesty i really enjoyed this poem |
| On September 28th 2007 California1516 Said : | |
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oh wow..i really like this one..its simply written...but i do like deep poems that make me think alot...nice writing skilz on this one:) |
| On September 27th 2007 Myst222 Said : | |
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Bad ass! I like the simpleness and the tone it gives. To the point, I like it!! |


