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Torn & Confused
I am faded
Like the county 10 skyline
I am jaded
Like your sweetly naive green eyes
And as you watch me
I pull the curtains closed
Begging for me, you follow
Why can’t you see I am a ghost?
My life is a constantly changing story
The characters change every chapter
My life is a romantic tragedy
And the love interests are all brilliant actors
I can’t love you like I did him
I can’t give you that much respect
I’m sorry baby but it’s true
You’ll never make up for my regrets
He’s gone yet fresh in my thoughts
He does not exist in my heart
You hold it whole and shattered
You keep it from falling apart
You make me feel so guilty
For something I have locked in the back of my mind
You’re almost perfect but you’re still not him
You’re both one of a kind
I just sit here on the roadside
Watching the clouds roll by in a blur
My next move is a mystery
So ready but still unsure
Give me a break
I’m still young, torn, and confused
Don’t pressure me for a future
Because the present is so new…
*I started writing this poem June 30th, 2009 and finally finished this morning.*
Please Login to post comments| On September 3rd 2009 feebleglurg Said: |
| I really like the last verse—I don;t know about the others, but the last one really spoke too me. No obvious mistakes, so I'll just say that it's pretty good. I wish I could write poems, they're so much different than stories—ooh, a story written in poems! That would be, like, three times as hard. |
| On August 20th 2009 huronpliskin Said: |
| Good poem. A rewrite to make it a little more fluid might help, other than that i love it. |
| On July 27th 2009 gonzo4201 Said: |
| great poem... |
| On July 23rd 2009 servantofall36 Said: |
| This is good. I am sorry you are suffering, friend.:( |
| On July 21st 2009 DashboardLogic Said: |
| @indifference21 I know it's piecey. It's actually 2 poems combined because it involves 2 diff feelings. 1. of not being able to get over a person and constantly comparing people to 2. After I did "move on" trying to figure out what to do next. At the time the 1st half was written I felt one way and by the 2nd half I felt another way about the situation. |
| On July 20th 2009 indifference21 Said: |
| It is a little "piecey" in my opinion. But I love how you can see and feel so vividly. |
| On July 19th 2009 RockAngelGirl Said: |
| yay! ^^ good job. |
