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The Severed Marionette
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Created on 6-1-08
Cast out all alone
I make the choices on my own
Freedom is not like how I was told
The world is dark, the people are cold
Severance has swept though me like a disaster
Where is my leader, my creator, my master?
You entered and left me like a fever
You severed my life lines like a cleaver
You cut all my ties with that bayonet
Now I’m just a Severed Marionette
I gave you control
Your hand replaced a tainted soul
Strings pulled the mind and heart
Will filled what was hollow and dark
Arms and legs to your words bound
Once cut, flailing and falling to the ground
You entered and left me like a fever
You severed my life lines like a cleaver
You cut all my ties with that bayonet
Now I’m just a Severed Marionette
Please Login to post comments| On July 24th 2008 yorkiedude27 Said : | |
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13bethany13- they rhyme
next time have some better constructive criticism |
| On July 14th 2008 Kidojidoari Said : | |
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I like your rhymes. :D I never thought of using "bayonet" and "marionette" together like that.
I really like this~ :] Not shallow (because saying that it's deep is said too much). |
| On June 28th 2008 Smarties4 Said : | |
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amazing... very deep (I know this sounds very cliche, but it's true - the master can be taken to be a mentor, a friend...anything or anyone really) Fantastically written :) |
| On June 2nd 2008 13bethany13 Said : | |
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bayonet and marionette dont ryhme and neither do heart and dark |
| On June 2nd 2008 palmtrees16 Said : | |
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oh my! this is very good! |
| On June 1st 2008 twilight8218 Said : | |
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great as always |
| On June 1st 2008 thuhchris Said : | |
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wow.. nice job man |
