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Views (65) Anger Created on 3-3-07 Flag

standing alone in a mist of something

its like a thousand spider webs pressing down on me

i can't break thru

can't break away

please someone save me

take me away from this hate

all this pain

save me from my own demise

created in the depth of my mind

scream against the bars they place on you

fight with all your heart

beat down the darkness

face the devil with his horde

crying in the mist of fire

pass thru the fire into the rain

drenched in something i can't remember

a feel of warmth on a cold night

wrapped in something i wished to believe

only to fall into the mist 

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On May 31st 2007 poopstix Said :
poopstix arent we all wrapped in something we wished to beleive and blinded at some point? i read it again and it is still awesome =) i like your metaphoricalness, like drenched in something i cant remember..
On April 4th 2007 poopstix Said :
poopstix thats really cool!
On March 20th 2007 BLuEEyEs1618 Said :
BLuEEyEs1618 Love it! Especially the ending, I love the lines towards the end
On March 5th 2007 londonchick50 Said :
londonchick50 Awesome! I love this! The ending lines really show alot. I love the last 2 lines! "Wrapped in something I wished to believe in. Only to fall into the mist." ^_^ (maybe add a word to the end, like "mist of night" or "mist, again" Something like that, only a suggestion.)
On March 5th 2007 Kittylace Said :
Kittylace "pass thru the fire into the rain drenched in something i can't remember" Great line!!