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Created on 12-26-07
laying on the block
tick like a clock
bleedin' half my the away
soldier and his gun
lookin a lil' stund
as i do my job today
he's drivin' by
tellin' lil' lies
still lookin' fly tryin' to surrvive and gettin all the pay
wind blowin' in
my message is sendin'
that my life isn't lettin me stay
bullets in my head , coming out with hearts
from the endding to the start
thats how it falls apart this day
-Ciara Davis
Please Login to post comments| On January 7th 2008 ReneakaKC Said : | |
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yea what he said... It's better to let the poem speak for itself than to add effect. LOL just a suggestion then again I'm not the greatest so yea... I like the first half tho. =) |
| On December 30th 2007 gonzo4201 Said : | |
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the lines make it very difficult to read, and ya kinda lost me on the third line but it was pretty good for the most part |
