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Created on 12-31-69
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Please Login to post comments| On March 16th 2008 Bloodlust90 Said : | |
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| On February 20th 2008 Lovelyeyes0 Said : | |
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I agree with realfiction616. It feels like you were trying to get this one perfect on the first go. Real poems flow from the pen to the paper, again, and again, and again, and again... Lol. You hardly ever get it right the first time, and when you do, it feels weird. Good effort though. Just remember, poetry is different than the rest of life: You should almost NEVER go with your first instinct. Lol. |
| On February 16th 2008 Halfpint9135 Said : | |
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Ouch. Awesome job. |
| On February 15th 2008 RealFiction616 Said : | |
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From what I can see in this poem i believe that you are trying to hard to be deep, it just doesn't flow for me the i feel it should, it's still a good poem, but next time instead of trying so hard just let it flow out of you |
| On February 14th 2008 twilight8218 Said : | |
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pretty good |
| On February 14th 2008 numba1chic Said : | |
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aww, i actually feel like this about a guy.... but he swears we are meant to be... but yeah i like this alot, brutal but the sad truth huh |
