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On October 15th 2007 VampirateRaven Said :
VampirateRaven butifulzzz! @_@
On October 14th 2007 Jeff1315 Said :
Jeff1315 very full of emotion, i really like it =] "Now your slipping away. From life, love, me, and yourself. Things have changed. I'm not sure what, why, or how." That line is very powerful. :)
On October 12th 2007 mypoeticrage Said :
mypoeticrage I like it, thumbs up
On October 9th 2007 darkangel726 Said :
darkangel726 i agree with tswieberg just keep at it
On October 8th 2007 akrovaz Said :
akrovaz Great job. I like the emotion poured into this one. The bold faced words really do emphasize the last line of the poem. I like it.
On October 8th 2007 LQQKatME6 Said :
LQQKatME6 It sounded good to me...Nice job!
On October 8th 2007 betyoucantgess Said :
betyoucantgess or**
On October 8th 2007 betyoucantgess Said :
betyoucantgess daaaammmmmnnnnnn! you told them! heyy can you check out my stories of poems, thnx!
On October 8th 2007 transgenic Said :
transgenic I love the line "Your eyes lose more color every time you look at me." I don't know what it is about it...
On October 8th 2007 ynot4u2hold Said :
ynot4u2hold I love it. Absolute masteripiece in progress, Keep up the great work.
On October 8th 2007 tswieberg Said :
tswieberg Amazing poem, it does need a little work, but I am sure you will get it. The emotion is there and it has great composition. Keep writing, you have talent.
On October 8th 2007 browneyes33 Said :
browneyes33 I think it was great, It was written like a letter to your love. I seen one spelling error that was It. The poem itself was great! Great imagery full of emotion. I liked the style. I can tell you are really growing in your writing, letting out the emotions. As far as sending the wrong message as the person below me said. It happens everyday it's fact. Great Job!!
On October 8th 2007 tyiqoqibfiobao Said :
tyiqoqibfiobao eh talking about cutting send the wrong message your trying to say you hurt me and i want to get your attention instead it sounds like i want and im upset i cant have it try saying that her face becomes more and more of a mask everyday since its losing emotion for you and try saying something like about cutting through her mask to make her see you again