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Deadly Water

Views (206) Pain Created on 7-19-08 Flag

Light reflects off the water
Moves as if alive
Like a snake over sand.
Light dancing across the water,
Like lovers dancing on their wedding day.
Light glittering in the darkness,
Playing across your face,
Shining off my earrings.

The ripples are s p r e a d i n g
Marring the mirror like surface of the water.
Light reflected now turns red.
Your cold body moves silently.
Slowing moving,

SINKING.

The ripples die and the water once more is still,
Still as your lifeless body.

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On October 17th 2008 darediva551 Said :
darediva551 this is amazing... i really like it and its written beautifully
On August 2nd 2008 luvhim4ever12 Said :
luvhim4ever12 great job
On August 2nd 2008 bittyb1 Said :
bittyb1 interesting...kind...dark like the person below me said, but at the same time..idk...not so dark...like it!
On July 30th 2008 shorteternity Said :
shorteternity That's...dark. I love it!
On July 26th 2008 gonzo4201 Said :
gonzo4201 very, very, interesting...
On July 26th 2008 kitty6593 Said :
kitty6593 very awsome it sent chills down my back
On July 21st 2008 Artemisseven Said :
Artemisseven amazing
On July 20th 2008 justjetjustis Said :
justjetjustis awesome ^^
On July 19th 2008 soinlove83 Said :
soinlove83 i really liked this one!
On July 19th 2008 jabip15 Said :
jabip15 like the similie useage!totaly awsome!
On July 19th 2008 XxCloudyEyesxX Said :
XxCloudyEyesxX the imagery is great and i love the s p r e a d i n g letters!!
On July 19th 2008 angelalone Said :
angelalone i like the simile.it's really beautiful.
On July 19th 2008 765433 Said :
765433 nice. i liked it
On July 19th 2008 sassak222 Said :
my picture
this is one of the best poems I have herd in a long time.
On July 19th 2008 CharTheKnight Said :
CharTheKnight Like the use of simile.