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Created on 12-31-69
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Please Login to post comments| On February 1st 2008 cmmtx Said : | |
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I suppose that in this poem you are speaking to a boyfriend? I'm not really sure there. Also, you broke the rhyming scheme on the last sentence, which broke the flow of the poem. Lastly, I'm not a big fan of such topics...in belief that they are overrated. BUT, all of this is just an opinion. Art is an opinion. Don't take my comments negatively, but consider them as constructive critisism...please. I would expect anyone to be just as honest with me, in order to help me further my skills. Otherwise, I could lie and say I love it...but that's all the comment would say, due to me not loving it. Lastly, my comments do not mean I hate the poem. They are just very specific opinions...which can tend to be a thorn in the side...of which I am sorry if that is the case. I do not mean harm. Well, good day to ya! |
